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社区应不应该建高中 思路混乱中 求救！

各位好
这道题偶个人的思路是：
应该建 原因1：方便社区内孩子上学 离家比较近
                   2：更安全 去远的学校上学路上车多 减少发生交通事故的可能性
                   3：可以带动社区经济的繁荣
                   4：有一点弊端因为学生的读书或活动声音会打扰社区居民
                   5：总的来说利大于弊 该建
但是看到李笑来的范文却是这样的：[table][tr][td]  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]The  basic prerequisite of success for any community is the education of its  citizens. Because the advantages [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]of a high school education in my  town are presently available to only a limited number of students every year,  I [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]wholeheartedly support the  construction of a new school facility to serve our community. [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=12pt] [/size][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]The  competition to get into high school in my town is fierce. There are three  middle schools in town, but only [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]one high school. Because the  number of applicants to the single high school far exceeds the available  spaces in the [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]high school, only the richest  and most qualified students are able to go to school. The skills taught in  high school [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]including advanced math,  analysis, and high-level reading and writing are important to every citizen,  no matter [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]what profession they later  choose. Even if they are manual laborers, the ability to critically analyze  problems taught [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]in high school will make them  better and more highly skilled workers. [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=12pt] [/size][/align]
  [align=left][size=9.5pt]Beyond teaching practical skills to more local children, another high school will give children more [/size][/align]
  [align=left][size=9.5pt]opportunity to attend college.  Holding a college degree is almost the only way a person can be assured of  getting a [/size][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]stable, high paying job. Even a  degree from a two or three year junior college can mean the ability to make a  salary [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]thousands of[i] yuan[/i]  annually higher than a high school diploma. [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=12pt] [/size][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]Because  our current high school is so small, many bright children with promising  college careers ahead of [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]them have no way of even  obtaining the high school diploma! We must make sure the road to higher  education [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]remains open for as many young  people as possible. [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=12pt] [/size][/align]
  
[align=left][b][i][size=9.5pt]Finally[/size][/i][/b][i][size=9.5pt],[/size][/i][size=9.5pt] if we cannot afford  to open this high school, our town will have a serious problem with the  number [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]of unemployed youths who  graduate from middle school with nothing to do. If they cannot find good  jobs, they [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]might be tempted to commit  crimes, use drugs, or, if they are girls, engage in prostitution. Giving  these children [/size][font=Arial][size=12.5pt][/size][/font][/align]
  
[align=left][size=9.5pt]another option would both save  them and help society.[/size][/align]


                    里面大部分都再讲建高中的好处或是教育的好处 于是我很茫然 不知道是不是自己理解偏了 请各位大侠予以指点不胜感激  [/td][/tr][/table]

[[i] 本帖最后由 xuxiaoqian1025 于 2008-2-12 12:26 编辑 [/i]]

这种题目没有什么标准，能写清楚就好了。

没理解偏，但第二条理由不是很有力的论证~建议去掉
把其他三个支撑写好就可以了

那李笑来那样写教育的好处是不是也可以呢？

那李笑来那样写教育的好处是不是也可以呢？