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Topic: It has been said,"Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important. Why?

Since this era is charactrized by the explosion of information, each of us, no matter old or young, is expected to gain knowledge to keep pace with the world. The two ways of learning, from books and from experience, therefore have caused comparison and debate. From my point of view, knowledge gained from experience is more valuable.

We should grant the importance of books. They lead us to the entrance of the world of knowledge. Their words, illustrations,briefly and clearly explain the truth in the world. With books' help,we can easily acknowledge the essence of many theories summarized by scientists after decades of hard word. However, included in the books are only basic rules and abstract concepts, more knowledge are to be explored in practical exercise and experience.

All the knowledge we get from books was primarily confirmed by practice. Any supposition, no matter how elaborated it is, only after experience's illustration can it become a theory. Furthermore, we cannot even ensure what is written in books is true. People believed with no doubt and wrote it in books that the earth is flat long ago. Especially with nowadays fast developing technology, knowledge become out-dated only after being printed into words. To exam our doubts and to get the new, we should devote ourselves to practice.

Knowledge gained from experience covers a wider range. You will never know what apples taste until you eat one. Most technology ask for proficiency after long time's exercise. It can be given a concrete example that when employ drivers, we usually prefer one with more years of driving experience, for he or she may know what to do under all kinds of circumstances. In addition, knowledge from practice is the extension of that from books. Books tell us concepts and formulas, thus practice teach us how to apply them.

What is more, knowledge from experience makes our world develop. All the inventions are inventede after numerous tests. All the new theories are suggested after suspecious thinking of written words. There is much to be explored after practice.

Books record ancestors' understanding, while experience reveals what life is really like.It is knowledge from experience that is more important in the evolution of human beings.

这篇是迄今写得最顺畅的~呵呵，终于体会到了一点写作的乐趣:-)

有时候我就在想，到底“互相批改”这种策略是否真的有助于彼此成绩的提高？从这篇文章，以及之前我看到的文章来看，事实恐怕与我们乐观的假设相去甚远。大部分TOFEL学员的英语写作能力都十分低下（否则他们也不会学这个），在文章中充斥着各种隐蔽的语法和词法错误。比起错误更可怕的是那些不确切不地道的英语，也就是Chinglish。那么，对于批改的人，由于其本身英语水平就十分有限，这种文章实质上只会对其产生进一步的负面影响。他会惊喜地看到他所喜欢的一招一式——那些其实不地道的用法——确实在被使用着；他会潜意识地被那些本不正确的语法结构所干扰，进一步扰乱其本已混沌的语法概念。

对于那些还在学习怎么用英语表达（尚未上升到作文这一高度）的同学，我建议你们应努力避免参与这种互相批改。这些内容对你们十分有害，因为你们有如未成年儿童尚无法分辨世间万物的真伪美丑般，对什么是正确的英语还不能做出有效回答。

那么应该如何流利而正确地表达自己的想法？在这个学习过程中，我认为输入训练与输出训练的比例应该是95：5。也就是说，阅读才是关键。单纯训练写作这种毫无思想性的作文毫无任何意义可言，因为你们的目标是正确的格式而不是独特的思想。而确保格式正确，则不是靠写出来而是靠读出来的。

那么来看看这篇作文的作者是如何恣意地发挥自己的想像，而不是基于大量的阅读，来完成他/她夹杂无数致命错误的作文的。

1，However, included in the books are only basic rules and abstract concepts, more knowledge are to be explored in practical exercise and experience.
后面一个分句忘了加and，不管是不知道还是忘了，都说明阅读量少，否则你自己就会觉得变扭。
2，Any supposition, no matter how elaborated it is, only after experience's illustration can it become a theory.
似是而非的又一典型案例。一个漂亮的插入语加上倒装结构何其气势磅礴，然而遗憾地由于一个词被漏掉而导致全局语法上不成立。试删掉whether句：
Any supposition only after experience's illustration can it become a theory.
再删掉after并还原倒装：
Any supposition it can become a theory.
问题显见：何以有两个主语？
改正：原句句首加For。
病因：阅读量！套用似曾相识的格式而不是建立于雄厚的原始积累往往学而不像。
3，You will never know what apples taste until you eat one.
看看这句：what apples taste。
有问题吗？没有。但是，没人这么说。They will say: "what do apples taste like?"
所以你应该说：You will never know what apples taste like until you eat one.

太多了，不说了。总之，对于大部分备考者而言，多写无益，写了放在这里更是贻误他人。疯狂阅读，才是王道。

谢谢你这么认真的批改，也实在抱歉自己没有仔细修改
我会加强阅读学习的:)

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