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考试前最后一片。谢谢批评~~

[font=Verdana][size=15pt][size=4]136. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing a game is fun only when you win. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.[/size][/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana][size=15pt][size=4]Everyone of us, including the adults and the children, all like to play games. It is obviously that during our growing process, games play an important role in our life. Why so many people enjoy playing games? As far as I am concerned, I think because people all enjoy the process of the games rather than the result. So I disagree with the statement that playing a game is fun only when you win.[/size][/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana][size=15pt][size=4]No one can deny the fact that compared with the result, we should concern more about the process of the things we do. So the same as we play games. People can learn more from the process of the games, and that's what really makes them fun. My roommate, Jane, who is a computer game fan, told me that the funniest thing in the game is that she improve her own skill during the game, although sometimes she was the loser. What people get from the process can help them learn a lot, no matter they are winners or losers, their personal abilities can improve dramatically. The moment you feel you have learnt something is your real funny.[/size][/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana][size=15pt][size=4]Another important factor that can not be ignored is that playing game is a process which makes people have access to communicate with others. So in the games, communication is more attractive than anything else. Sometimes, I also play games with my friends, we talk and discuss something when we are playing, I think it can really help me relax and relieve the pressure from my work and study. It's the funniest thing when I play games. What's more, play games with people you don't know can help you develop your ability of communication and interpersonal skills. No matter whether you win or lose at last, you have got what you want, that is fun.[/size][/size][/font]
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[font=Verdana][size=15pt][size=4]In conclusion, when judging a game is fun or not, I think the most important factor is that whether you enjoy it. The result of the game is nothing when compared with the things people learn from the process of the game.[/size][/size][/font]
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周六就考试了，最后一篇，欢迎大家来看看~~

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一路走好,语句流畅,观点明确,不错

The moment you feel you have learnt something is your real funny.
应该是ur real fun吧

还有一个小地方需要提醒你一下`如果可以的话`表述题目观点尽量改写`也就是换一种表达方式`尽量不要照抄题目`如果表达不出那也没什么大关系`!呵呵`预祝你取得好成绩`!

第一段：our life/lives.我觉得复数好一点
后面那句，应该是why do so many ppl enjoy playing games?
再后面那句，我觉得应该是i think it is because ppl all enjoy the process of the games rather than ..

同加油吧，我也明天上考场，祈祷一下