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12月8日赶考,最后一篇,拜托大家!

如题,最近学校事情多,没时间了,只能练习这最后一篇了,谢谢大家.

Computer Technology&Basic needs

[font=Calibri][size=3]Computer, the greatest invention in 20th century, has entirely changed our lives in various ways. Many specialists deem that computer technology is supposed to be developed as the much as the government could afford, while on the hand, some believe the money which spend on those technology should be used on the basic needs of a country. As far as I concerned, computer technology is the most important system of a country in the modern world.[/size][/font]
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[font=Calibri][size=3]Most of all, computer changed our lives on the basic level, which made our lives more convenience. People who live in nowadays connect with computer every day, like receiving email, reading news, playing games which is one of the most popular entertainment of children. The first thing that I have to do right after I get up is checking the email from my friends and reading the newsletter from the websites which I fancy. I could not forget the days that I cannot get online due to I was going to place where has no computer around for an art trip. Each day I felt missing something so I cannot do things well. That is one experience which I do not want to undergo ever again.[/size][/font]
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[font=Calibri][size=3]Computer technology makes new ways for commercial developing. Numerous companies currently are based on the computer technology. People who work in video, accounting, science and even fashion have to use computer everyday. Without it, people would spend most of time on count the numbers again and again which they just don’t know why they should to do this, and cut films with a scissor and clue. Tommy, one of my brothers, who work in a big company and be in charge of accounting. He told me he could save bunch of time to count and compare the numbers which are completely enormous than he used to be since his company imported the advanced computers.[/size][/font]
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[font=Calibri][size=3]Basic needs as well is essential for a country, however, during recent years the definition of the basic needs has changed gradually with the evolution of commerce. Computer has already became one part of the base of commercial field.[/size][/font]
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[font=Calibri][size=3]As most people believed, computer is one the crucial parts of which are directly related to our daily lives. Developing the technology of it will constantly reform our lives during future, which is the way it is meant to be.[/size][/font]
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12月8号的考生？
你在那考？

长沙
帮忙看看,谢谢

computer不能单独用吧，没有冠词什么的

as far as i [color=darkorange]am[/color] concerned

[[i] 本帖最后由 ruily31 于 2007-12-5 10:44 编辑 [/i]]

谢谢楼上的朋友,结构,语法方面有什么问题么

强呢强呢～～

我也8号考  一起加油

有几个问题。
1.As far as im concerned...之后，你应该点题，比如说：therefore, government should develop computer technology as long as they could afford.
2.as the much as..没听过这说法。
3.on the other hand..instead of "while on the hand"
4...right after..有一些不professional
5.i felt something missing..我觉得这么说比较顺
6.Tommy, one of my brothers, who work in a big company and be in charge of accounting.这句话没有说完，只有主语。应该把后面那句和它连起来说，不如后面说..told me that..
7.As most people believed, computer is one the crucial parts of which are directly related to our daily lives.这句话前后时态不统一。而且我也不确定前面说的对不对。
8.Numerous companies currently are based on the computer technology. 感觉搭配有点不对。companies为什么要based on technology呢。应该是companies’ operation或者别的什么吧
9.Computer has already became one part of the base of commercial field.如果要用完成时，became应该改成become。
先说这么多吧~希望不太晚~

呵呵,我今天才看到,不过还是谢谢楼上的朋友了,你说的都是我自己容易犯的错误,反正还要考第二次的,再次感谢

希望可以分享一下考试的经验

Sorry,昨天考完脑子一片空白,又连夜赶回学校为了今天上午的考试,所以就没有写什么
第一次考真是记不住什么题目,阅读做的一塌糊涂,看得云里雾里,第一篇最后一题看都没看时间就到,后面也赶时间没看得很明白,居然栽在中国考生最好的阅读上......
听力赶上了加试,之前听课被迷惑了,说17道题10Min,还以为一共3篇,结果是每部分3篇然后2部分....再加上赶上加试听的头都大了,不过还好最近2月练习的最多的就是听力,所以感觉还算正常
因为入场早,因此做题之前只听到1-2人说口语,大致猜了一下题目,按照自己平时说的段子组织了一下,第一题说的还算流畅,第二题因为没听到再加上问的是平时根本没有练习过的题目,结果说的比较差,后面结合听力和阅读的段子说的还算正常,最后2道因为平时练习听力较多,笔记记得比较全,因此发挥的还不错
综合写作,因为听力有保障,基本上把3点都听出来了,关于蜜蜂跳舞的,不过考前没练习过综合写作,时间上没把握好,语言不太讲究,不过我想既然3点都有,应该分数不会很低吧,独立写作时间把握的不是很充分,语句还是有些欠考虑,一直到最后1秒才搞定......

总体来说这次考试发挥还算正常,阅读的不理想并没有影响到我后面的发挥,也应该得益于平时的抗干扰练习吧(寝室比较吵~),用时接近4小时,中间休息的10分钟吃了2个香蕉,因为天气较冷,长沙的考点居然也不给开空调,害得我出来之后胃很难受.考点条件还可以,皮椅+液晶显示屏,座位还算宽敞,不过键盘一般,而且最出乎意料的是居然只给3张草稿纸,多一张没有.......
所以考试前还是要有这些心理准备,平时练习的时候也不能当作纸无限来练习,这次差点栽在这上面(不只一个老师说过考试时的草稿纸尽管要.....),还好我平时练习的笔记字都不大,最后还没用完~老师态度一般,前面的指导老师态度很好,后面监考老师态度比较冷漠.....
大概就这么多吧,第一次体力差点不支,上午灌了4包咖啡才撑住直接导致考出来直犯恶心,所以题目没记得什么,只能抱歉了,希望这些有帮助