第二篇~大家表不理我呀~
Are parent good teachers?Nowadays, people pay more and more attention to the problem of children’s education. Some consider that patent play a pivotal role during children’s growth, even claim that parent are good teachers. Nevertheless, I think this claim should be taken into account.
First of all, not all parents could serve as good teachers. Even though parent almost instinctively devote themselves to cultivating their offspring, the outcome might come out to be disappointed, for all children tend to unconsciously or subconsciously copy everything including bad ones from their parents. As it happens, a child, whose parent are smokers, has more interesting in smoking than that with nonsmoking parent. In his/her opinion, smoking is not a big matter and he/she just follow parent. Certainly, this child parent have already done their utmost to be models in front of their baby, but, sometimes, it is impossible for them to take everything into account. We are not Gods, so we have, more or less, some defects, indeed. Consequently, in some sense, not all parents are able to be good teachers, even though they seriously want to be.
Then, we can not deny the fact that not all things, considered to be beneficial by parent, are good for children. To get a full appreciation of what this mean we must turn first to a phenomenon under depute. Some parents end to pursue their cherished but failed dreams, such as to be a doctor or a attorney, by forcing their children to develop in a prearranged direction. It is true that children would have a clear path towards their future, if they could do well in the prearranged direction. However, it is not always the case. It is doubtful to say whether it is meaningful for oneself or not to come true and prolong others’ dreams, even though their parent. Also, children have their own ideas and should be encouraged to come up with, but not be told what to do or what not to do. Wishing children having a better future, parents don’t necessarily always remain objective toward their children. In consequence, it is hard to say that parents are good teachers.
Parents may, whereas, help their children much more than do good teachers. We can not and should not undervalue the parent’s importance in the development of children. In a word, it is rather superficial to simply say that parents are good teachers.
已经用word纠过错了~ 期待中。。。 搬个凳子，再看
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