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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Do you agree or disagree that parents are best teachers[/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Nowadays, many people discuss a real important statement that whether
parents are good teachers to their children. There are many examples show us that the way which parents usually use to teach their children are not exact. They often force their children to do something which can be harmful to them. However, I deem that parents will be good teachers in most problems because they understand their children deeply and also have enough time to teach their children.[/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Many people believe that parents cannot be a good teacher for the generation gap. During the development of society, many parents find that they have many gaps with their children. It is generation gap. According to the social department of FuDan university, there are about 80 percents of families have generation gap. It illustrates that there may have a lot of problem between parents and children. For me, I often argue with my parents when I must come back home. And my parents force me to go home before 11 o'clock. Although I am an adult, my parents also treat me like a child.
Because of the generation gap, parents will force their children to do something they want. When they teach their child, they will also do it.[/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Although there have many problems for parents to teach, I think parents will be good teachers for many advantage. First, parents live with their child and take care of their life. So they have enough time to teach their child in some normal daily activities. For example, parents can teach their child how to avoid traffic accidents when they walk around road. Also teacher may tell their students when to cross the road and when to stop. But they cannot cross and stop with students. Living together is a big advantage that parents have when they teach their child.[/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Additionally, another advantage that parents can obtain is understood. Parents look their children grow from a baby and take care of their daily life. They know what their children want and think about. As a result, parents can easily understand their children' action and choose something useful to teach. Like the movie Forrest Gump show. When the war is end, Gump meets his lover, Jenny, and wait for her in his hometown for a long time. He feels absolutely sad. Then Gump's mum gives him a direction and leads him to find a new way. She understand her son and can encourage him in a true way.[/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Above all, if parents and children can have a deeply communication to decrease their generation gap, children will realize that parents have told them a lot of experience about life which is very useful. And parents also need take the advantages of enough time and understanding to teach their children. I believe parents can be good teachers.[/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]貌似有点偏题了。。。大家狠狠的拍我！！！[/font][/size]

Nowadays, many people discuss a real（really） important statement that whether
parents are good teachers to(of) their children. There are many examples show us that the way which parents usually use to teach their children are not exact. (是例子不准确还是方法不正确)They often force their children to do something which can be harmful to them（them指的是parents or kids）. However, I deem that parents will be(我觉得用are好一些) good teachers in most problems（在大多数情况下是吗？ 我觉得用on most occasions） because they understand their children deeply and also have enough time to teach their children.



Many people believe that parents cannot be a good teacher for(because of) the generation gap. During the development of society, many parents find that they have many gaps with their children. It is generation gap(这是多余的，还有with the development of ...). According to the social department of FuDan university, there are about 80 percents（percent） of families have generation gap. It illustrates that there may have (不是there are 句型吗？)a lot of problem between parents and children. For me, I often argue with my parents when I must come back home（I often have arguements with my parents about the time I go back home ）. And my parents force me to go home before 11 o'clock. Although I am an adult, my parents also treat me like a child.
Because of the generation gap, parents will(tend to) force their children to do something they want. When they teach their child, they will also do it.



Although there have (are)many problems for parents to teach, I think parents will be good teachers for many advantage(s). First, parents live with their child and take care of their (指的是孩子吧，但是你仔细读，不是孩子是家长，不能是照看生活)life. So they have enough time to teach their child in some normal daily activities. For example, parents can teach their child how to avoid traffic accidents when they walk around road（road去掉）. Also teacher may tell their students when to cross the road and when to stop. But they cannot cross and stop with students. Living together is a big advantage that parents have when they teach their child.（Although techers may told students what should be noticed while crossing road, it can not compared with the live and vivid instructions from parents. Therefore, parents are qualified to be their children's teachers in that they could make most use of the time with their children to exert influence in word and in deed. ）



Additionally, another advantage that parents can(去掉) obtain is understood（这句话的意思是父母的另一个优点可以被理解吗？我不明白。）. Parents look their children grow from a baby and take care of their daily life（是照看他们还是他们的日常生活）. They know what their children want and think about. As a result, parents can easily understand their children' action and choose something useful to teach. Like the movie Forrest Gump show. When the war is end（ended）, Gump meets（met） his lover, Jenny, and wait for her in his hometown for a long time. He feels absolutely sad. Then Gump's mum gives him a direction and leads him to find a new way. She understand her son and can encourage him in a true（right） way.

Above all, if parents and children can have a deeply communication to decrease their generation gap, children will realize that parents have told them a lot of experience about life which is very useful. And parents also need take the advantages of enough time and understanding to teach their children. I believe parents can be good teachers.

我也是第一次给人改作文，不知道自己改得到底对不对。要是有错的，请见谅。我感觉你的作文太Chinglish了，还有电影里面是不是应该用过去式？ 加油。

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