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8月24就考试了，拙作诚征修改

[font=Calibri][size=3]话题是：说得好比写得好更重要，是否同意？[/size][/font]
[font=Calibri][size=3]Recently, a controversy about whether speaking is more important than writing as communication skills has been brought to public attention. I concede that people with higher speaking ability and limited writing skills, in some cases, are privileged over experienced writers who are not inclined to express orally, there is still no justification to conclude that speaking is advantageous over writing without thoroughly thought over all situations. [/size][/font]
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[font=Calibri][size=3]Speaking and writing, in fact, share numerous similarities because they are both output of languages, which can be utilized to express one’s opinions and convey one’s emotions. To live in our fully civilized society, both speaking and writing are indispensable, for no one can avoid from communicating with other members. Contrary to their seemingly contradictory relationship, speaking and writhing serve as mutual supplements to each other, because the combination of speaking and writing is the only way to establish a social connection. Let me take the forming process of a contract as an illustration. The first step is to write precise and concise provisions, the second step is to negotiate these provisions, and the last step is to make an agreement. Lacking either of the first two steps, a contract is not supposed to form. Clearly, such interdependent relationship can effectively weaken the argument that speaking enjoys more importance than writing.[/size][/font]
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[size=3][font=Calibri]Some people might object that speaking and writing are quite different skills although they are both outputs. Moreover, the difference between speaking and writing may be responsible for the distinguished roles they play, which determine that speaking is much vital in social life. Admittedly, differences do exist between speaking and writing, however, their differences, from my perspective, is not striking enough to determine their relative significance. Why I am so confident to maintain this, that is because I’ve uncovered the nature of their difference. As two conversing measures[/font][font=宋体]，[/font][font=Calibri]speaking and writing merely differs in exhibition. That is, speaking is more direct and immediate while writing is more clear and long-lasting. Coordinate with these distinction[/font][font=宋体]，[/font][font=Calibri]speaking, necessitating swift reaction rate,is more widely applied in business areas, whereas writing is more highly required in academia, which calls for preciseness. Nevertheless, speaking is also needed in academia in some circumstances, say presentation and academic conference, similarly, writing cannot be neglected in business areas, when it comes to the contracts and projects. However obvious the difference is between these two skills, their equal status should not be denied because their same nature is unchangeable.[/font][/size]
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[font=Calibri][size=3]Considering all the factors above, I have strong reason to point out that it’s unfair to judge speaking is more important is more important than its counterpart, writing.[/size][/font]
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[font=Calibri][size=3]辛苦大家，不胜感激:) [/size][/font]

谢谢啦:)

我觉得写的很好，楼主还是背了不少的固定搭配和表达方式
Why I am so confident to maintain this, that is because I’ve uncovered the nature of their difference. 中的that是不是应该去掉呀。

Nowadays, more and more students try their best to attend college or university, why they are longing for it? Different people hold different perspectives, but for my account, there are three reasons for it.

First, attending college will give us a great chance to gain a better life. With the knowledge we learn from university we can better understand the world we live. For example, we can have more clear awareness when we encounter the transformation gene plant, how to deal with it, whether it better for our life and worse to our health? Also, I am one of few people who can attend to university. Most of my classmates who cannot go to university have worked in a small factory in my hometown. And now with the experience of university and knowledge I have the opportunity to work in the well known tourist city, and have enough money buy a house of myself, that means I and my children have opportunity to enjoy the facilities of the city provides.

In addition, in my opinion, attending university can help us get a good job. It is essential to us to get massive opportunity of a decent job. Our university provides us several courses to improve our skill for careers, and a lot of information of job in your major. So with the skill, knowledge and information, we are more likely to get a decent job with more satisfaction. Can you imagine a graduate student majoring in biology still do cleaning in the street. It is believed that he sits in his office and do his research, enjoying air-condition. Compared with those who have no university experience, university students are more likely to have a decent job. So university experience is critical to students to get a good job.

The third reason for attending university is to increase knowledge. Obtain knowledge is a wonderful thing for me. When I can solve a problem of chemistry, learn to the history of my country, I can enjoy the great delight. Also knowledge expands our eyesight by informing us lot of new things what we cannot gain from our common life or experience.

As far as I'm concerned, attending university can help me get a decent job, a better further of my life and more knowledge. Hence, it is necessary for students to try their best to complete their university and get more knowledge and a colorful future!

大家也帮忙看下我的

谢谢了！

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貌似是的，谢谢哦～

transformation gene plant 最好改成 gene-transformed plant 吧，个人意见。
whether it better for our life and worse to our health，中间缺少Be动词。
attend to university？ attend表示上学的时候应该是及物的吧，to是不是可以不用。
a better further of my life 这个表达觉得有点奇怪，不过我也不知道怎么改
希望意见对你有帮助～
另外一点小建议，求拍作文的话最好自己建个贴，呵呵

transformation gene plant 最好改成 gene-transformed plant 吧，个人意见。
whether it better for our life and worse to our health，中间缺少Be动词。
attend to university？ attend表示上学的时候应该是及物的吧，to是不是可以不用。
a better further of my life 这个表达觉得有点奇怪，不过我也不知道怎么改
希望意见对你有帮助～
另外一点小建议，求拍作文的话最好自己建个贴，呵呵