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[color=red]Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. Which point of vie do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.
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People without education is like flowers without sunshine while education without classes is like fish without water.
However, there is no consensus among students as to attending classes.[/font][/size]
[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]From my personal angle alone, I believe that classes should be optional for students.
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First of all, students should have rights to elected classes for the simple reasons that they are the most important factors in the education.
Secondly, If they should be required to attend classes, it’s terrible to see that all of the students have to spent whole day in a boring classroom to attend the lessons they may not interested. From psychological aspect, the majority of students seem to tend to have a unfavorable attitude toward classes they don’t really like. [/font][/size]
[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Besides, It’s hard to imagine a student focusing their energy on textbook while this book is chosen by schools in stead of by themselves.

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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]lastly, it is obvious that learning the classes which they chosen contributes directly to them to become a educated person. learning knowghlogy they want to study will help the students realize their dream in their life.[/font][/size]
[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]In conclusion, I am fully convinced that it is better for going to classes should be optional for students. I have a dream that one day we can chose our favorite classes freely, for paradise is just a place where we can learn the knolege we like.

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是庄重的学生么？
文章字数太少了 显得内容太空了
尝试为自己的分论点写例子 来充实 来发展自己的分论点

我说的例子 是具体的例子 包括细节的例子！
比如你的这段话：Besides, It’s hard to imagine a student focusing their energy on textbook while this book is chosen by schools in stead of by themselves.

为什么hard imagine 如果这样了会有什么样的后果， 举个例子吧， 否则太空洞了很难拿高分

谢谢

是的,:) 谢谢老师点评,我继续努力