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[font=Times New Roman]004 It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]Though most of our knowledge is absorbed in book, it is really wrong to make such a decision that book is more important that experience as a source of knowledge, without consideration that knowledge is coming from experience, servicing for practical life and developing in our real society.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]First of all, originally, knowledge, whatever it could be classified, comes from experience. When someone met some problems in his real life and a good solution is proposed, we could call it "knowledge", instead of being created by someone who publishes the book with his colorful imagination. Furthermore, our knowledge is confined by our horizons, which is related directly to practical life. No body, even he is Einstein, could think out the inner structure of certain particle, because we have not experience about it. We have never seen it. So, knowledge is based on experience.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]Second, knowledge's significance is to benefit our lives. That is why we pay attention on knowledge, show our respect on who owns lots of knowledge and write into book which in ture is seen as the main source of knowledge by mistake! One example is presented here that when a man has learned how to mend a car, it makes sense only if he did mend car for others, or the technique of mending has nothing to do with knowledge. And the success of modern society should own to being accumulated knowledge. It is knowledge benefits us and it is also knowledge distinguish us from ancient human beings! [/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]Finally, knowledge is developing in our society, not in the papers which made up the books. Since the invention of book, we can acquire knowledge from it. it could tell us what has been done, but it can not tell us what will be done. The trends and demands of knowledge is varying by the time and space, but not in the boring and stiff books. We have to update knowledge with the environment and the situation we are in. If an engineer do not keep step with changing knowledge, ten year latter he definitely will feel lagging. [/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]To summarize, book and experience are both a kind source of knowledge. But the latter is also the aim and direction of knowledge. Therefore it is not difficult to answer the question: which one is more important.[/font]

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先贴我的,等下给你改,不过我的论据写得不好,希望你也多给点意见

For most of the time, there is no consensus among people to sucha a question: learning from books or experience, which is a beeter choice? Some people maintain that the knowledge gained from experiences is the most precious that one can ever has. On the contrary, some other people would argue that book is one's best teacher.
From my personal angle alone, my point of view coincides with the latter. The reasons I have are as follows.
For one thing, the books from which we could choose  cover a wider range of knowledge than a certain experience does. Admittedly, the knowledge gained from the experience may have been a better accepted by us and a longer memory as well. However, considering the limited time and energy an individual has, the knowledge gained in the book is a better choice. Even when some information escapes from us once in a while, we can immediately renew it from the book. Take cognizing some certain plants for example, you don't have to actually go to the field to have a better look in order to have a better memory. Instead, you can refer to a book with the pictures of the plants. Even when you forget their name in the future, just open the book.
For another, the money invested in the books is a better choice when compared with the investment on the experience for knowledge. As far as our students are concerned, we have almost no income if not taking account of the support from our parents. Besides, if learning the books from the library, the investment on books can be minimized. Thus, gaining knowledge from the books is indeed a better choice for us.
Admittedly, there are also some advantage in learning from the experience which we cannot deny. As the saying goes, practice makes perfect. But in my opinion, it should have the precondition that having some related theory from book.
From what have been discussed above, we can take it for granted that the importance of learning from books outweighs that of learning from experience.(347words)

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Though most of our knowledge is absorbed[color=red](from)[/color] in book, it is really[color=red](absolutely/definitely会不会比较好？)[/color] wrong to make such a decision[color=red](这个貌似也不是决定，conclusion会不会比较好？)[/color][color=black] that[/color] book is more important that[color=red](than)[/color] experience as a source of knowledge, without consideration[color=red](或者considering?) [/color]that knowledge is coming from experience, [color=red](which)[/color]servicing for practical life and developing in our real society.([color=red]这句比较长，我也觉得我改得不好，水平有限，不好意思)[/color] First of all, originally, knowledge, whatever it could be classified, comes from experience. When someone met some[color=red](any[/color][color=#ff0000]会不会比较好？因为前面someone已经有some了)[/color]  problems in his[color=red](or her不要性别歧视哦)[/color] real life and a good solution is proposed, we could call it "knowledge"([color=red]which called "knowledge"会不会比较好？)[/color][color=#000000] , instead of being created by someone who publishes the[color=red](a)[/color] book with his colorful imagination[color=red](这句我看不太懂)[/color]. Furthermore, our knowledge is confined by our horizons, which is related directly to [color=red](the)[/color] practical life. No body[color=red](nobody/no one比较好，因为nobody有小人物的意思),[/color] even he is Einstein, could think out[color=red](figure out会不会比较好？)[/color] the inner structure of certain particle, because([color=red]for会不会比较好？)[/color] we have not[color=red](no)[/color] experience about it. We have never seen it[color=red](这句去掉吧)[/color]. So[color=red],(去掉,或者把so改成Thus)[/color] knowledge is based on experience. Second, knowledge's significance is to benefit our lives. That is why we pay attention on[color=red](to)[/color] knowledge, show our respect on[color=red](to)[/color] who owns lots of knowledge and write into[color=red] (a)[/color] book which in[color=red](in which)[/color] ture[color=red](truth)[/color] is seen as the main source of knowledge by mistake! One example is presented here that when a man has learned how to mend a car, it makes sense only if he did mend car for others, or the technique of mending has nothing to do with knowledge. And the success of modern society should own to being[color=darkred]([/color][color=red]去掉)[/color] accumulated knowledge. It is knowledge [color=red](which/that)[/color]benefits us and it is also knowledge distinguish us from ancient human beings! Finally, knowledge is developing in our society, not in the papers which made up the books. Since the invention of book, we can acquire knowledge from it. it could tell us what has been done, but it can not tell us what will be done. The trends and demands of knowledge [color=red]is varying(varied)[/color] by the time and space, but not in the boring and stiff books. We have to update knowledge with the environment and the situation we are in. If an engineer do not keep step with changing knowledge, ten year(s) latter he definitely will feel lagging[color=red](lagged).[/color] To summarize, book and experience are both a kind source of knowledge. But the latter is also the aim and direction of knowledge. Therefore it is not difficult to answer the question: which one is more important. [/color]
[color=red]建议楼主多分成几段，一个观点一个自然段看着比较舒服[/color]
[color=#ff0000]还有觉得好像没有明确站在那一边，呵呵，最后一句不要这么含蓄嘛。。。[/color]

[font=宋体][size=10.5pt]For most of the time, there is[color=blue] no consensus[/color][/size][/font][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]（[color=blue]写得好的地方我用蓝笔标出啊）[/color] among people to such[color=red]a [/color]a question: learning from books or experience, which is a [color=red]beeter[/color] choice? Some people maintain that the knowledge gained from experiences [color=red]([/color][color=red]能用复数吗？)[/color]is the most precious [color=red]thing[/color] that one can ever has. On the contrary, some other people would argue that book is one's best teacher. [/size][/font]
[font=宋体][size=10.5pt]From my personal angle alone,[color=red] my point of view[/color][/size][/font][color=red][font=宋体][size=10.5pt]（重复了）[/size][/font][/color][font=宋体][size=10.5pt] [color=blue]coincides with[/color] the latter. The reasons I have are as follows.
For one thing, the books from which we could choose cover a wider range of knowledge than a certain experience does. Admittedly, the knowledge gained from the experience may have been a better accepted by us and a longer memory as well. However, considering the limited time and energy an individual has, the knowledge gained [color=red]in[/color][color=red]（from）[/color] the book is a better choice. Even when some information escapes from us once in a while, we can immediately renew it from the book. [color=red]Take cognizing some certain plants for example,[/color][color=red]（这半句话说的太难受，建议换一个表达方法，像For instance which is related to cognizing certain plants ）[/color] you don't have to actually go to the field to have a better look [color=red]in order to(thus you could ) [/color]have a better memory. Instead, you can refer to a book with the pictures of the plants. Even when you forget their name in the future, just open the book.
For another, the money invested in the books is a better choice [color=red]when [/color]compared with the investment on the experience for knowledge. As far as our students are concerned, we have almost no income if not taking account of the support from our parents. Besides, if learning the books from the library, the investment on books can be minimized. Thus, gaining knowledge from the books is indeed a better choice for us.[color=red]([/color][color=red]个人觉得这段写的不好，没有把投资在书本上比投资在经验上好说清楚，感觉跑题了)[/color]
Admittedly, there are also some advantage[color=red]s[/color] in learning from the experience which [color=red]we cannot deny[/color][color=red]（与admittedly 重复了）[/color]. As the saying goes, practice makes perfect. But in my opinion, it should have the precondition [color=#ff6600]that having some related theory from book.[/color][color=#ff6600]（这句话语法错了，such as related theory from book）[/color]
From what have been discussed above, [color=blue]we can take it for granted that[/color] the importance of learning from books outweighs that of learning from experience.(347words)[/size][/font]
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[font=宋体][size=10.5pt]总体来说，文章组织得很好，就是结构很好，让人一目了然，这点表扬一下。[/size][/font][font=Tahoma][size=10.5pt][/size][/font]
[font=宋体][size=10.5pt]但是最大的缺陷就是我上面提到的那一段，没有吧道理说清楚，很主题和文章的联系，让人摸不着头脑[/size][/font]
[font=宋体][size=10.5pt]合作愉快[/size][/font]

先贴一篇自己的上来，马上给你看哈

[b][font=Times New Roman]Do you agree or disagree: Most people prefer others making decision for them than making a decision for themselves. [/font][/b]
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[font=Times New Roman]Nowadays, there is a hot saying that people prefer to make decisions by others rather than themselves. From my point of view, however, I strongly disagree with it. Our modern people are more independent than those before and want to be responsible for ourselves’ future. [/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]To begin with, we have a deep understanding of ourselves and exactly know what we want to own in the future. Because of the rapid development of society, we have more time to contact with different kinds of people and do a great deal of practice work which will help us understand our advantages and disadvantages of ourselves. For instance, if one finds an apartment job as a seller in a mall which needs many communication skills with individuals, he does it very well. It implies that the man is open-minded and good at doing some practice work. On the contrary, a man failing in the selling work should choose other kinds of works which do not need many communication skills. Depending on the self-understanding, we can be more confident and desirable to make determination by ourselves.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]In addition, we prefer to be responsible for ourselves and are not willing to complain others.
Nowadays, we have many opportunities and alternatives. It is possible that we will have different ideas on something with our parents. Taking choosing one's major as an illustration, you want to choose a major that you are interested in such as arts, while your parents want you to choose the medical major for good job. On that condition most of youth will follow their own desire now. For the reason they are not willing to regret in the future.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]It is true that we should ask others’ suggestion before making the determination. We can get advices from those experienced men who can help us making decisions as right as possible and it will let us save a lot of time. [/font]
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[size=10.5pt]So from all the analysis made above, we can conclude that people are more willing to make decisions by themselves rather than depending on others. They just ask for some suggestions sometimes.
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