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7月12日作文求拍!!!

Is playing a game fun only when you win?
Playing game is one of the most popular form of entertainment. Every country has a number of popular game that play all the time. Some people hold that playing game is fun only when you win, however I disagree with it. In my opinion, I think playing game itself is full of fun, wining a game is just a pleasure extra. All reasons are coming follow:
On the one hand, when you first start playing game, it is difficult to win the game all the time. But you still can bring happy from the game. I n my view, if you playing game with the top player of this game and losing is an honor. he age-old adage says the practice make perfect. This is as true in game as it in other endeavor. In other to win a game all of time, you should practice it over and over.
On the other hand, people enjoy the process of playing a game because of the social aspects. Playing game especially a long enduring game like Chinese chess is a bonding experience. Games are bonding with other people, which make them excellent for improving one’s social skill,in addition to have fin.
In sum up, I strongly believe that game can be fun even if I am not the winner, if you want win the game all of the time ,you should practice it over and over. Games bring us closer to our friends, because we have fun experiences with them. There are many excellent reason to pay agame beside winning.


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分论点要精炼, 我觉得你的第一个分论点改成

1 lost games can also bring fun to people

你原文论点其实没出来, "when you first start playing game, it is difficult to win the game all the time." 这句话完全不该在第二段开头出现,这是论据!  然后"But you still can bring happy from the game.",这是一句ms论点的话,但是用bring不妥,要用obtain happiness.

综合全文,论证不到位,而且字数不够.