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[size=3][font=Arial]题目是: Do you agree or disagree plan when people still young[/font][/size]
[font=Arial][size=3]万分感谢先！！[/size][/font]
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[size=3][font=Arial]When it comes to the question whether people should plan for their future, people’s idea are not cut from same cloth. Many people believe to have more flexible attitude is better for young people development, but their believe can not arouse any echo in my mind. As far as I am concerned, advance planning is critical to have a success life. Advance planning bridges your target and yourself, connects your action and goal, and links the short term achievement to the next one. [/font][/size]
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[size=3][font=Arial]First and foremost, advance planning when people still young could make you have clear picture and goal of your life with strong resolution, on the other hand, it goes without saying that the absence of planning will lead you feel puzzle at some cross roads. Life is a matter of choice, in particular for young people, who obviously lack of experience when sundry options in front of them. For instance, popular culture like real people show exposure every young people in every corner, many young guys become more likely to be “somebody” over one night by participating various TV program. Advance planning obviously could help young people to resist such kind of disturbance, while can be concentrated and perseverance. [/font][/size]
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[size=3][font=Arial]Furthermore, advance planning could help young people to grow up in more systematic and efficient approach. By taking full advantage of a great blueprint of personal development at early stage, young people could proceed the growing as scheduled. People can do the right thing at the right time, at the right place. In contrast to the possible disorder way derive from missing schedule. Although people work may hard, lost in miscellaneous efforts sounds somehow busy, and waste precious time and resources.[/font][/size]
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[size=3][font=Arial]Last but not least, a good advance planning give young people virtually more flexible than people might realize. Planning does not indicate everything should stick to unique way. In fact, however, good preparation always expect unexpected. It is easy to imagine young people could enjoy it while something unusual occurred. [/font][/size]
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[size=3][font=Arial]To sum up, young people absolutely can get benefit more from advance planning! [/font][/size]

这么多人看,怎么没有同学近来指点一下啊,自己顶以下

1When it comes to the question whether people should plan for their future, people’s idea are not cut from same cloth

这个句子有些怪.people would  plan for  their  futures are helpful in more than one way.

2 Many people believe to have more flexible attitude is better for young people development, but their believe can not arouse any echo in my mind.

there are several reasons why we  should doubt  the idea that  plan when people still young

3 first  of all  --------------- secondly -------------

4 As far as I am concerned, advance planning is critical to have a success life. Advance planning bridges your target and yourself, connects your action and goal, and links the short term achievement to the next one.


As far as I am concerned, i agree ..................

5  First and foremost, advance planning when people still young could make you have clear picture and goal of your life with strong resolution, on the   other hand, it goes without saying that the absence of planning will lead you feel puzzle at some cross roads.

句子语法问题太多.

谢谢101..你的提醒很及时..我在认真看..
第一次写,匆忙之下只顾立意,却忘记基本文理通顺之要务!
再次感谢!!:handshake

哈哈.哈哈.我也不知道怎么写作文

people would  plan for  their  futures are helpful in more than one way.there are several reasons why we  should doubt  the idea that  plan when people still young.first  of all  --------------- secondly -------------As far as I am concerned, i agree ..................

it is harder and harder to be a  young  people now . he  needs  not only   future plan  but also  daily  plan  that  is  all  imprortant  to him .just as the daily plan should be easy  made ,for instnce,  early rising  ,walking ,and reading ....................

这样写跑题吗

on the other hand , future plan seems .....................