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【求助】请大家指导一下我的回答 [在线播放]

全真状态试了下 只能编到这种程度 45秒才说了90个字 而且说的也惨不忍睹 附件是后来又说得音频 比第一次快乐9秒 用了36秒:L J5fQ(R4|4L2K'c/M7Y(p
题目： Some peple like going after fashion. Others don't. Which do you prefer and why?
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Well, personally speaking, I don't like to go after fashion. The reasons are as following.
.Z0m;P"EF:u8Ip First, because I'm still a student, and so I can't afford to purchase any latest and fashionalbe things.x4hY\a2d;w"^NN
And also, if I spend too much time in going after fashion, my acedemic performance will definitely decline.
D3V+d8xL Therefore, it isn't worth it.
6Vd]5C;v-[x Finally, my father is really strict with me and always tells me focus all my energy and time on the study instead of other things.
P*}Nj&P8w8J Well, that's the reasons why I hold the position.
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点评：
\KP&wIT 1.delivery 存在问题。具体体现在：
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     1）/r/ 可能受方言影响，有点像/l/： as in reasons, really. sg0`vp/Ja
     2）following不清楚。purchase发音错误。
aw/sh_zi      3）th 体现的咬舌音：as in things, worth。8j[-?3_G%~7^C[!d l
  (2) 节奏感不强，语调平淡。诸如first, finally等过渡信号词的提示不够突出。S8zH
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2. Topic development is not full. 3o:V1e)e*z;v-j%M&h
3. 语法小问题：because   so 不能连用。5{Y7sn.~.A
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建议:
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&^8v+d9H ~@(EO+G*s 2. Topic development方面：建议使用1+6+1 组合。即开头结尾各一句，中间三个理由，每个理由两句。另外注意长短句的有效配置。通篇只有2个复合句。
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H+F5BlHuy [[i] 本帖最后由 秋姐 于 2008-6-12 04:21 编辑 [/i]]

回复 2# 的帖子

谢谢 秋姐！！！！
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[[i] 本帖最后由 xueshanhu 于 2008-6-12 09:12 编辑 [/i]]

这贴也帮你顶一下，希望更多的同学参与进来，更多的人上传自己的录音