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Coincident with concerns about the accelerating development in our society has been a growing appreciation of the transportation, which is considerable significant to our daily lives. Although for many people, the assertion that more and more automobiles will put into use in the next 20 years seems true, as far as I am concerned, it is rather superficial to simply say like that.

Basic to people’s standard of living are cars. Automobiles, invented two centuries ago, increasingly use nowadays, with diversified brand and appearance, become the most powerful means of transportation, and is more and more difficult to ignore. Cars are as much a part of our lives as are our meals, work, or school. Recent studies have shown that an American spends more than two hours on driving every day on average, and in the past two years, the profit in car industry has been increased 9.8% in china. Hence, we always see the passage in newspaper or magazine titled “crazy rise, automobile!”

Tempting as such a claim might be, it is hardly to educe the conclusion that there is a constantly increase about the auto use in the next 20 years. Enough as traffic problems we have, more and more people are aware of the disadvantages of driving private cars, including traffic jam, the lack of parking lots,and so forth. For example, it is not ridiculous for people who living in Beijing to have spent more than 2 hours and still don’t arrive at the destination which is merely 10-kilometer away. In other words, drving a private car means much more time is wasted. If we can’t harvest convenience by buying a car, how can we say it’s a wise choice to spend 100,000 yuan on owning a private automobile? How can we ensure much more cars will put into use in the next 20 years?

Matching to the heavy traffic and serious condition of parking lots is the high cost of energy resources. As we know, gasoline is such a thing that can’t reproduce easily, in other words, the more gas we consume, the less one exist in the world, and the higher price it worth. While more and more people can’t afford gasoline, our government in Beijing has cost 100 millions yuan to develop our public transportation, such as bus system and subways. it is 2 yuan that we just spend on taking a subway per time, and why not give up driving private cars?

As is demonstrated all above, I agree there may be a couple of advantages to buying a private car, I feel that the disadvantages to own an auto are more obvious. We should endure the traffic jams with noise, the crowded parking lots and the high cost of gasoline price if we driving a private car to go to work. with all those factors, I don’t agree that more and more automobile will put into use in the next 20 years.

[[i] 本帖最后由 WOBUSHI007 于 2008-6-10 15:54 编辑 [/i]]

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