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16 what's your opinion on a new restaurant built in your neighborhood?

I live in the center area of our city.There are many shops,supermarkets,and a big bus station not far away,also many restaurants were built around my community. I wouldn't like to build new restaurant here, as that may lead to more pressure on our community,and more heathly ,loving home cooking are called for in the modern society.

   a new restaurant would give more stress on the surrounding of our community,such as the traffic of the main street,our living envirnment. On one hand,as a big bus station was near our community,traffic jams always troubled drivers and passers-by.In order to release the street stress,the government put a ban that the cars,buses and other motor vehicles  should not be allowed parking on the main street over 10 minuts.However, if a new restaurant were built in our community,the center city's limited space  would restrict the restaurant's parking lot.In general saying,the deverlopment of a new restaurant can't depart from large number of customers.Thus,the convenient traffic or more allowded parking place would give important contribute to the restaurant.Nevertheless the more traffic stress transfering from new restaurant  will come out.

   On the other hand,as you know,in the center of the city,we have several kinds of restaurants,say,big ones with wanderfull envirerment and delicious dishes,small ones with quick well teast food and  economical cost,street side food stands also very populor with snack.They are enough ,and we don't need any more.Furthermore,a new restaurant will bring more air and water pollution,from cooking and washing.Maybe it is not serious that only a new restanrant's pollution,but in our low level quality of envirnment community,it also harms a lot.
   
    Finally, although the resaurant food is delicious and fast ,it hardly ensure the quality of the food.As many newspapers report,the oil in many restaurants is from the recovery of have been eaten.It is harmfull for our healthy.so that,out eating --the less,the better.Meanwhile,as the fast development of our society,more and more people are busy for working and without much time with family.Encouraging more people home cooking is a good way to enjoy the company of family.Preparing,cooking,eating,we are all together ,enjoying our dinner time and sharing our happiness.Maybe it takes little longer than eating in the restaurant, though,it worths.

   Admittedly,it will make people's lives more  convenient,and stimulating local consumption from building more restaurants.However,in the center community of our city,the stress of traffic and envirnment is heavy,we also need more healthy envirnment and food.Thus,the benefits are less than the harms for a new restaurant foundation.

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