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[font=Calibri][size=5]学校学习的LESSON重要还是 学校外的?[/size][/font]
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[size=5][font=Calibri]"Knowledge is power". With the fast develop of the world, lesson, another form of knowledge, people would learn it in a vary way. Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion between whether people should get their most important lessons in school or outside the school. From where I stand, I cling to that people should learn them in the school.[/font]
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[font=Calibri]To begin with, people can learn lessons in a proper speed, schedule and [color=#ff3399]quantity[/color]. Confucius, the noted educators and philosopher in China, convinced that”People should study in a right method”. When people are six or seven years old, school teaches them some learning skills, such as reading, speaking, writing and so on. As time passed, people can learn some advanced lessons and knowledge from school, Chinese, English, mathematics, physics. After many years of study, with [color=red]sufficient [/color]knowledge and intell[color=red]i[/color]gence it is time to go to college. Specialized subject, the important lesson in future work, people begin their further education. All of study all done step by step. Hardly can I imagine that without these [color=red]systemic[/color] school lessons would we still enjoy the diversity and colorful of the world. [/font]
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[font=Calibri]Furthermore, school lesson exert a [color=red]decisive[/color] effect on people's characteristic, even the future life. Teenage years, people will greatly affected by environment. When we are working on science subject, long time spend on one complicated problem can greatly cultivate our independent thinking ability; in the liber[color=red]al[/color] arts lesson, we are roaming in five thousand years history of China; we strengthen our critical thinking ability; the more time taking parts in colorful activity, the creativity developed. These are essential characteristic in our life. On the contrary, according to a recent survey conducted by C.C.O. (China Campus Organization), points out that more than 60 percents of people who have not go to high school or college are  lack of these characteristic. Results them live in a arduous life. It is no doubt that school lesson is irreplaceable in people's life.[/font]
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[font=Calibri]Admittedly, outside school lessons, to some extent, may have their own merits, such as people can gain working experience, the independent ability, and the adventure experience. However, school lessons have more merits as systemic study, help people [color=red]cultivate[/color] their characteristic and have a better life in future. Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that the merits of school lessons overshadowed the advantages of outside school lessons, so I still cling to my point.[/font][/size]
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[font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]"Knowledge is power". With the fast develop[/size][/font][size=12pt]ment[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] of the world, lesson, another form of knowledge, people would learn[/size][/font][size=12pt](learning[/size][size=12pt])[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] it in var[/size][/font][size=12pt]iet[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]y way. Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion between whether people should get their most important lessons in[/size][/font][size=12pt]([color=red]from)[/color][/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] school or outside the school. From where I stand, I cling to that people should learn them in school.

To begin with,[/size][/font][size=12pt] school course ensure[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] people learn lessons in a proper speed, schedule and [color=#ff3399]quantity[/color]. Confucius, the noted educator[/size][/font][size=12pt](qu)[color=red]s[/color][/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] and philosopher in China, convinced that[/size][/font][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]“People should study in right method”. When people are six or seven years old, school teaches them some learning skills, such as reading, speaking,[/size][/font][size=12pt] [color=red]and[/color][/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] writing. As time passed, people can learn some advanced lessons and knowledge from school, [/size][/font][size=12pt]like [/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]Chinese, English, mathematics, physics.[color=red] After [/color][/size][/font][size=12pt]that[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt], [/size][/font][size=12pt]the[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] sufficient knowledge and intelligence[/size][/font][size=12pt] make people able to receive further education,[/size]
[size=12pt]s[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]pecialized subject[/size][/font][size=12pt].[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] All of study all [/size][/font][size=12pt]seted[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] step by step. Hardly can I imagine that without these [color=red]systemic[/color] school lessons would we still enjoy the diversity and [/size][/font][size=12pt]colorful([color=red]fascination[/color])[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt].[/size][/font][font=宋体][size=12pt]都是名词！[/size][/font][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]

Furthermore, school lesson exert a [color=red]decisive[/color] effect on[/size][/font][size=12pt] [color=red]cultivating[/color][/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] pe[/size][/font][size=12pt]rsonal [/size][size=12pt]ability[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt], even[/size][/font][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]future life. When we [/size][/font][size=12pt]work[/size]
[font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]on science subject, [color=red]spend[/color][/size][/font][size=12pt]ing a long time [/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]on complicated problem[/size][/font][size=12pt]s[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] can greatly [/size][/font][size=12pt]enhance[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] our independent thinking ability; in the liber[color=red]al[/color] arts lesson, we are roaming in five thousand years history of China; we [/size][/font][size=12pt]can [/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]strengthen our critical thinking ability; the more time taking parts in colorful activit[/size][/font][size=12pt]ies[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt], the[/size][/font][size=12pt] more[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] creativity[/size][/font][size=12pt] are[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] developed. These are essential [/size][/font][size=12pt]abilities[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] in our life. On the contrary,[/size][/font][size=12pt] teenagers[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] will[/size][/font][size=12pt]([color=red]are)[/color][/size][size=12pt]readily[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] affect by[/size][/font][size=12pt] the detrimental aspects of[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] environment[/size][/font][size=12pt]. A[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]ccording to a recent survey conducted by C.C.O. (China Campus Organization), points out that more than 60 percents of people who have not go to high school or college are[/size][/font][size=12pt] live in a hard life[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]. [/size][/font][size=12pt]A[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]rduous life[/size][/font][size=12pt] comes from lacking school lesson[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]. It is no doubt that school lesson is irreplaceable in people's life.


Admittedly, outside school lessons, to some extent, may have their own merits, such as people can gain working experience, the independent ability, and the adventure experience. However, school lessons have more merits as systemic study, help people [color=red]cultivat[/color][/size][/font][size=12pt]ing[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] their [/size][/font][size=12pt]abilities[/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt] and [/size][/font][size=12pt]enjoy [/size][font=GungsuhChe][size=12pt]better life in future. Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that the merits of school lessons overshadowed the advantages of outside school lessons, so I still cling to my point.[/size][/font][size=12pt][/size]
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[[i] 本帖最后由 wuhao5217195 于 2008-6-3 23:44 编辑 [/i]]

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可否指出一些呢?
:lol

第一段

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谢了呵~~
1 那是手误呵....
2  learned in a vary way?
3 get from?
4 哪个短语错了呢?

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我意思是
2 改成  
lesson, another form of knowledge, learned in vary way.
下面的还有什么错误没呵?

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早说了应该看范文去。。。你还写

多谢小雨伞~~
我再仔细改改~
太多了.........

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回复 9# 的帖子

convinced that 事态是错误的
这个本来就是确信的意思呵  不是过去时

lesson, another form of knowledge,  IS  learned in vary  way. ........IS learning ..........哪个好啊.
这个 是改后面的那个吗?

[quote]原帖由 [i]`小雨伞[/i] 于 2008-6-3 22:05 发表 [url=http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=161941&ptid=15562][img]http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
你的电脑知识怎么样啊.哈哈.谢谢啊 [/quote]

??????
电脑知识???

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回复 18# 的帖子

1 那个我用得少  不太清楚

2 一样的 和系统没关系
网上邻居那可以弄的~

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