yoyo 2008-5-18 21:30
TWE185的一篇，考前冲刺，谢谢大家了！
128. Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
A good health is a foundation of study. As long as students have good bodies, they could do well in their studies. Thereby, I’m strongly agree that a part of everyday in school should be reserved for students to do exercises.
First of all, it is taking exercise constantly that could offer students good bodies. Through taking a series of exercises, student's muscles become stronger than before. Meanwhile, their immune systems are strengthened either. Their abilities to defend from bacteria are enhanced, so that the odds that students are absent for illness is reduced. Conversely, without taking exercises, students just only sit in the classroom to read, or face on computers a whole day that can render lots of diseases. Sitting for a long time could lead to sickness about person's shoulder or back. On the other hand, either do people read on traditional books or on the computer can be harmful to their eyes severely.
Moreover, doing sports can relax and relieve the pressure from study. According a recent survey from internet, the illness caused by pressure has been expanding from adult to students. The amount of students who be/fail ill because of pressure is increasing. The innumerable homework and a variety of classes bring a lot of loads on students' backs and strain their nerves, whereas, modest sports could provide them a chance to relieve their pressure and refresh their minds. During the process, they could dedicate themselves to the movement, forgetting those pressures temporarily. It is beneficial to students' bodies as well as their spirit health. And as taking a break in the sports, they are more likely to be eagle to come back the class and concentrate on the study.
In addition, it is significant for students to learn more about what is the sportsmanship is. Most sports need to cooperate among team members. Each team member in the movement should not only concern himself behavior and situation but also his partners’. Students, with attending these activities, could realize not only that the achievement is not a thing that one person could take but also the honor possesses each one of the team but the one. And, during the process, maybe, they could learn to encourage each other, or give a favor to the others who are in troubles.
However, it is necessary that doing sports should be of correct methods that exercise modestly. Otherwise, consequence following unsuitable exercises probably is that hurt self body. But, compared with seldom doing exercise, there are lots of merits of doing sports for students that can not only keep a good health and relieve the pressure from study but also learn more some knowledge or spirit that is not available on their texts. Therefore, I expect to reaffirm my perspective that physical exercise, for students, is mandatory in every school day.
tigerchenji 2008-5-22 23:04
很长啊，赞打字速度
tigerchenji 2008-5-22 23:24
个人观点： 第一段写了body,第二段就不要提body了，只写spirit
说。。。on internet反而让人觉得没根据。干脆不说，要说就编具体点，哪个网站。。。
in addition段中那句很长的句子看的我眼花缭乱的，还是觉得不太通，干脆分成两句吧，
总体来说觉得写得很规范，比我自己写得好，学习学习
