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5月8日发放作文题8

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[size=4]Do you agree or disagree: University students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study.[/size]

[size=12pt][b][size=4][size=12pt]Should students be required to take basic science courses even they are not part of the field of the study,[/size] [size=12pt]as some people believe here? [/size][size=3][size=12pt]I[/size] [size=10.5pt], naturally , give an answer "yes"[/size] 。[size=10.5pt][/size]
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[size=12pt]From time immemorial, basic science classes are definitely crucial to our development, at every stage of life. There's not doubt that our global village has filled with amazing things. If students only seek knowledge for its own sake,in a single area, accurately speaking, and now, attempting to through this way can not catch the rapidly and unpredictably changing world. However, students have the ability to take their own field courses and basic science classes both. Additionally, If we did not study the basic science classes such as math, physics, etc, we would not get some of today's achievements.  we would not have found cures for dangerous diseases if we did not have medicine. Even thought, we might not doctors, without such a study, our world be in serious trouble of poor health and living standards. [/size][size=12pt][/size]
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[size=12pt]Let's assume that all of us are less of basic science knowledge, how can we make our lives better? Like a musician, my intimate, music is her field, and she pays all the attention to music when she was a student. Guess! What happened? Of course, she became a musician, but, she can not do other things in a effective way. When some of our classmates talk together, she always wordless. Sometimes we have wished to understand the heart of human, we have wished to know why the stars shine, and we have tired to apprehend the pythagorean power by which number holds sway above the flux, a little of these we have achieve, but through discussed we have found many things having fun, all of these can help us relax, and make our friendship deeply. We all are sharing the basic happiness, except her.I believe only this simple example can bear out that how the basic science important for us.[/size] [size=12pt][/size]
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[size=12pt]Admittedly, basic science classes are necessary, but not unique. At present, also, people should engage in their main field and try to do their best and combined with basic science knowledge.[/size] [size=3]Because so many fields of study are related, you never know when knowledge from one area will be helpful in another.[/size]
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[size=12pt][b][size=4][size=12pt]Generally speaking, no matter what we do, no matter where we are, searching for more knowledge in a variety kinds of area and embrasing new things are immutable facts, will guide human to a colorful and successful life.[/size] [/size][/b][/size]
[size=12pt][b][size=4][color=#ff8c00]不好意思，早早占了位置，可是才发上来，因为下午有期中考试，所以才有找到时间完成，写的很匆忙，找不到合适例子，希望大家多多给我建议，和修改，谢谢啦，嘻嘻。[/color][/size][/b][/size]
[size=12pt][b][size=4][color=#ff8c00]规定时间，445字。字数似乎有些多了。[/color]

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[[i] 本帖最后由 melissa_lee 于 2008-5-10 22:48 编辑 [/i]]

考完了,这次写的比较take time,共40分钟多，414words，检查拼写+语法

[size=3][font=Calibri][font=Calibri]Everything or nothing, a traditional topic in philosophy, is also controversial in many other fields because as some scholars believe,[/font][font=Calibri]when you have everything,[/font][font=Calibri]you have nothing. Similar situation happens in study area,[/font][font=Calibri]which including whether the university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study because they are useful.[/font][font=Calibri]Being a student,[/font][font=Calibri]myself,[/font][font=Calibri]I always consider such study should not be concluded in students' works.[/font][font=Calibri][/font][/font][/size]
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[size=3][font=Calibri][font=Calibri]The society which are we all living[/font][font=Calibri] in[/font][font=Calibri],[/font][font=Calibri]foremost,[/font][font=Calibri]needs everyone to do his/her best in his/her specific area by the reason that the division of the society classes. A man who does outstanding in advertising could not do the same in architecture but not for the reason that he/she is not smart enough, which is proved by all the current remarkable workers.[/font][font=Calibri]Jenny,[/font][font=Calibri]my friend,[/font][font=Calibri]who has won tons of times awards of fashion, cannot edit her own design sketch on computer instead of by hand even though she was taught more than dozens of time, which would not be a reason that calling her stupid.[/font][font=Calibri][/font][/font][/size]
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[size=3][font=Calibri][font=Calibri]Taking lots of classes, furthermore, especially in science area would need much more energy which is one valuable factor for the people live in nowadays,[/font][font=Calibri]who are suffering by all the pressures from the modern world. Science classes, the developing field by numerous generations' study, have already referred to so many areas that people with limited energy cannot learn them all in one life even though just the basic level. Students in Zhejiang University, according to a research, 70% of them are failing from more than one class that they are not major in. They will not be able to use such knowledge for a great chance after the graduation, which is the main point that they should not waste energy on those areas.[/font][font=Calibri][/font][/font][/size]
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[size=3][font=Calibri][font=Calibri]On the other side, students learning in other science areas have some benefits which including helping them doing better when they are cooperating with people from others. The problem,[/font][font=Calibri]nonetheless,[/font][font=Calibri]still has because of the basic knowledge they learned from university could not help when they are working with other-field people for most of the time.[/font][font=Calibri][/font][/font][/size]
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[size=3][font=Calibri]Learning all well is learning no well.Instead of trying so hard on some areas that are helpless and we probably will never learn well, as a conclusion,we could save our energy on one specific area we could do much better which would help our society much more.[/font][/size]

[[i] 本帖最后由 hys17 于 2008-5-10 20:23 编辑 [/i]]

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[/font][font=Arial]Should all college students take basic science classes even if their major have little, or even no connection with science? Some people may argue that it is entirely unnecessary because time and energy spent in these academic studies is totally useless and life-wasting. However, in my point of view, I stand that all university students should be required to take several basic science classes.[/font]
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[font=Arial]Learning basic science is beneficial to broaden one's perspective. Take biology as an example. When we find the variety and complexity of life, it is able for us to apply this principle to other areas, such as analyzing the behaviors of different people. Because there are so many kinds of life in nature, we have to treat them according to their different characters. Of course, it is conducive to the study of humanity and philosophy.[/font]
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[font=Arial]In addition, basic science is the foundation of a number of other applied sciences such as construction, medical field or engineering. If students prefer to pursue their future in these fields, it is almost a must for them to master relative knowledge in basic science like math, physics and chemistry. And it is nearly impossible for a student who is poor in these basic sciences to accomplish his/her academic career well. [/font]
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[font=Arial]What is more, to learn basic science is also an effective measure to promote the communication between distinctive studies. Nowadays the interaction between diverse academies are increasingly frequent, people who know more about numerous different kinds of knowledge and information have become dramatically popular than ever before. For instance, an art student who has an understanding of digital field is well accepted by many employers, since they are able to use computers to deal with their paintings. Therefore, students who take basic science classes are not only enhance the communication between academics, but prone to gain more job opportunities. [/font]
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[font=Arial]In short, judging from the compelling evidences provided, it should be safe to draw the conclusion that it is dispensable and vital for any university student to take at least one basic science class, even though they are not part of the field of the study. [/font]


[font=Arial]大家拍吧，这回好不容易在规定时间写完了，但字数不理想:( 加油:D [/font]

[[i] 本帖最后由 cami119 于 2008-5-9 10:52 编辑 [/i]]

明天考试。。今天再占一个吧

[font=Times New Roman]六月份考，第一篇作文，40多分钟，感觉写的一般，欢迎大家狠拍！！！[/font]
试着改了4楼的作文，在8楼。

[size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Nowadays, it is a wide debate about the issue that whether university students should learn some basic science knowledge even they are not part of the field of study. Believing that students should learn other basic science knowledge, these people argue that a wide range of knowledge could bring more opportunities in their future. On the other hand, those who think students should study much deeper in the field of the study believe that specialists are more successful in the professional fields. In my own opinion, I agree with the former view. And then my arguments for the point are listed as follows. [/font][/size]
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[font=Times New Roman]The most important reason for my view is that the people who have a wide range of knowledge meet the requirement of the modern society. Following the development of science and technology, there is an increasing demand for people who are able to take in a great area at a glance. There is, in other words, a demand for people who are capable of seeing the whole forest rather than the trees, of making overall judgment. So I think it is necessary for university students to understand other basic science knowledge which is not part of the field of their main study.

Another important aspect is that students can have more choice in searching themselves interest if they take certain number of other basic science classes. Many students may choose their major in haste and don’t know what they really interest at the beginning of attending university. If they take other basic science classes, they could find their interest fields and be able to timely change their major. As a consequence, they can learn in an active way.

All in all, I think that university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study, because a wide spectrum of knowledge can not only bring more opportunities to students, but also help them figure out what they really like to do.[/font][/size]

[[i] 本帖最后由 cysunshine 于 2008-5-9 15:40 编辑 [/i]]

好像就我写的时间最长了～～从来没在规定时间完成过～郁闷，怎么才能提高速度啊？:Q
顺便说一句～最前面那位小马妹妹写的真好～～
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Basic science subjects could enhance students whole qualities and benefits the development of them, however, take too much subjects, especially those which have no relation with students’ professions, isn’t always a good thing. [/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]First of all, everybody’s energy is limited, no one can afford too much classes. There are lots of major subject classes undergraduates should take, even though they do their best, they still, however, fail to grasp all knowledge. Simultaneously, most of their time that is used to learn major subjects is occupied by other irrelative curricula. As a result, exams of their professional curricula fail. Another deficiency of taking too much class is the fact that knowledge probably can be forgotten because seldom undergrads have opportunities to connect them to life or work. Students who graduated from universities usually work in their professional field, whereas knowledge that has no relation to their profession and far away from life initially reserve in their minds and then gradually forget.[/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Moreover, the motive to study derives from interesting, but, there is less probability that students are fascinated to every curriculum. If learning under condition that there is no interesting, the process just only by dedicate with boring and painful. They don’t learn with their hearts in those classes with an outcome that they definitely fail to passing exams. Even though they do their best and get a good score in exams, whereas, they just study for exams rather than really grasp knowledge. They also forget all of knowledge probably just needing several weeks, or even one week. You ask them answer a question that they did it in last exam, they probably have no idea about it. [/font][/size]
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[size=14pt][font=Times New Roman]Basic curricula, nevertheless, expand not only undergraduates’ horizon and make them know more about the world they live in, but also perfect a view of their life and the world. Take a subject of history as an example. It provides for us a chance to recognize how our ancestors lived in prehistory and how the world developed. However, students who take basic curriculum that is out of their profession are supposed to be under the condition that they have sufficient time, or, studying is meaningless. In a word, it is rather superficial to say whether students should take basic science classes including those that aren’t part of their profession or not.[/font][/size]

[[i] 本帖最后由 yoyo 于 2008-5-9 21:10 编辑 [/i]]

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[color=blue]Should all college students take basic science classes even if their major have little, or even no connection with science?[/color] Some people may argue that it is entirely unnecessary because time and energy spent in these academic studies is totally useless and life-wasting. However, [color=red]in my point of view（from my point of view）[/color], I stand that all university students should be required to take several basic science classes.

Learning basic science is beneficial to broaden one's perspective. Take biology as an example. When we find the variety [color=darkgreen](diversity)[/color] and complexity of life, it [u]is able for [color=darkgreen](enables)[/color] [/u]us to apply this principle to other areas, such as analyzing the behaviors of different [color=black]people[/color]. Because there are so many kinds of life in nature, we have to treat them according to their different characters. Of course, [u]it is conducive to the study of humanity and philosophy ([/u][color=darkgreen]这句我没有太理解明白[/color][u])[/u].

In addition, basic science is the foundation of a number of other applied sciences such as construction, [u]medical field([color=darkgreen]可以考虑换成一个单词medicine，这样并列会整齐一些[/color])[/u] or engineering. If students prefer to pursue their future in these fields, it is almost[color=black] a must[/color][color=red] [/color]for them to master relative knowledge in basic science like math, physics and chemistry. And it is nearly impossible for a student who is poor in these basic sciences to accomplish his/her academic career well. [color=blue]（这个例子比较好，我咋没想到呢。不过例子比较短，可以考虑把第三段提到前面）[/color]
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What is more, [u]to learn[/u] ([color=red]为了学basic science 是一个有效的方式？改为learning吧，或者是直接用basic science做主语[/color][color=darkgreen])[/color] basic science is also an effective measure to promote the communication between distinctive studies. Nowadays the interaction between diverse academies are increasingly frequent, [color=red](差个连词？hence/thus)[/color] people who know more about numerous different kinds of knowledge and information have become dramatically [color=red](more)[/color] popular than ever before. For instance, an art student who has an understanding of digital field is well accepted by many employers, since they are able to use computers to deal with their paintings. Therefore, students who take basic science classes [u]are not only enhance the communication between academics ([color=red]这句的[/color][/u][color=red]主语是学生，学生增强了学术交流吗？),[/color] but prone to gain more job opportunities. [color=red]（感觉例子与论点不太符，论点是增进学科间的交流，而例子是提供更多的工作机会）[/color]

In short, [color=blue]judging from the compelling evidences provided, it should be safe to draw the conclusion that it is dispensable and vital for any university student[/color] to take at least one basic science class, even though they are not part of the field of the study.

[color=darkgreen]绿色字：不是错误的，但建议改改[/color]
[color=red]红色字：个人认为是错误的:)[/color]
[color=blue]蓝色字：写的比较好的:)，值得我借鉴的，呵呵[/color]
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[b][color=darkred]第一个参加在线作文活动，第一次改作文，肯定有不当之处 :) [/color][/b]
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[[i] 本帖最后由 cysunshine 于 2008-5-9 14:22 编辑 [/i]]

今天发作文了 哈哈
40分钟....

[font=Times New Roman]"Knowledge is power". All kinds of knowledge can divided into two groups, basic science and [/font][font=Tahoma][size=10.5pt]liberal arts[/size][/font][font=Times New Roman]. Students are facing with the choice that whether they take science classes or not. From where I stand, I prefer university students should be required to take basic science classed even they are not part of the field.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]To begin with, basic science classes study can greatly develop the independent thinking ability and logical thinking ability. Those ability are exert a dominate effect in our life. Firstly, let us get down to fundamental of the basic science. Basic science, when I was start to learning it, I have to solve and figure out a lot of difficult issues and problems. Only can I do is coherent all the aspect of knowledge and focus all my attention on it. I will not stop working until the moment I figure it out. Besides, during this process, I had combine different aspects of knowledge together, and searching my answer from them. It is no doubt that these ability are essential in our daily life, hardly can I imagine that if students have not take basic science classes that they surely would lack these abilities in their life.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]Furthermore, basic science can being used in every where and it plays a vital role in our daily life. I can think of no better illustration as following case. The water of the lake is frozen, I saw a people running through the ice, suddenly, the ice was broken, and he fall into the lake. Fortunately, the worker in the park saved him. But I noticed that when the people try to help him, they were laid on a big piece of board. That motion reminded me the physical classes, "The larger surface contact with a subject, the less pressure is loaded on the object". I consider the man who dropped into the lake must have not taken basic science classes in his school time. Science can help us in our life even save our life.[/font]
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[font=Times New Roman]Admittedly, required all the university students to take science classes may have their own disadvantages. Not everyone have great interest on science, so, they may spend a hard time through classes. However, science classes can great enhance our independent thinking ability, logical thinking ability, to some extent, it can save our life. Now we can draw the conclusion that the merits of taking science classes overshadow its disadvantages. So, I still cling to my point.[/font]

[[i] 本帖最后由 wuhao5217195 于 2008-5-9 15:41 编辑 [/i]]

回复4#的帖子
第四段论点语言都写的很好
学习....

If students prefer to pursue their future in these fields,it is almost a must for them to master relative
这句有点问题吧?  
prefer to have further development in these fields, it is almost a required courses to....
还有第一段感觉主题句和后面的论证相关不大样的
只看得出这些了
不知道对不 ni再看看吧

先上课去了:lol

回复 2# 的帖子

发贴很积极，初看了一下，的确有些需要改进，主要问题是口语话的东西较多，尽量用书面语替换吧。
不过行文还是很流畅的，看出你应该没花太久时间完成这篇。继续努力

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刚来的小马积极批改作文，这很好，
我们的规则是一般楼上改楼下的，你就等你的楼下来改你的作文吧。

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哈哈是哦，只用了24分钟，想到什么就说什么了，还有关于口语话的问题，可不可以帮我具体指出？ 因为我不怎么会很正式的语言。很着急

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Nowadays, it is a wide debate about the issue that whether university students should learn some basic science knowledge even they are not part of the field of study. Believing that students should learn other basic science knowledge, these people argue that a wide range of knowledge could bring more opportunities in their future. On the other hand, those who think students should study much deeper in the field of the study believe that specialists are more successful in the professional fields.(这句感觉没写完~) In my own opinion, I agree with the former view. And then my arguments for the point are listed as follows.

The most important reason for my view is that the people who have a wide range of knowledge meet the requirement of the modern society. Following the development of science and technology, there is an increasing demand for people who are able to take in a great area at a glance. There is, in other words, a demand for people who are capable of seeing the whole forest rather than the trees, of making overall judgment. So I think it is necessary for university students to understand other basic science knowledge which is not part of the field of their main study.

Another important aspect is that students can have more choice in searching themselves interest if they take certain number of other basic science classes. Many students may choose their major in haste and don’t know what they really interest at the beginning of attending university. If they take other basic science classes, they could find their interest fields(interest是名词，可以那么用吗？) and be able to timely change their major. As a consequence, they can learn in an active way.

All in all, I think that university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study, because a wide spectrum of knowledge can not only bring more opportunities to students, but also help them figure out what they really like to do.
最好不要照搬题目的原句，适当改动一下，用自己的话说出来，语法方面的我就看不出来了，我语法太烂了~呵呵，互相学习。我也六月考。

回复 2# 的帖子

按要求改一下2楼的朋友
确实如版主所说,口语化表达太重,观点很明确,不过其中专门分了一段来讲例子的做法我不能肯定是否有问题,但是就以往的经验来看,还是按照经典的论点-论述-例子的套路来写,毕竟iBT考察是学生有没有具备到北美学习的能力，写学术性论文是有一定的固定格式的

不过语言方面不是一蹴而就的，相信这位朋友是心急没有想到很好的表达方式，随着练习的增多自然会有很好的改善，有些语法错误，请这位朋友自己找一下，相信只要细心还是能看出来的。

论述结构方面，2、3段的论述关系我不是很明白，究竟是递进还是并列，如果是递进的话，建议将第2段插入到第三段中去，原因在上面也讲了。而如果是并列，那么第2段的论述太短以至于让人不能信服这是一个分论点，而且叙述的不是很清楚，无论如何一个分论点都需要一个充分的论述或例子来充实，第3段的论述的说服力感觉不够，因为题目是关于别的领域的知识的，如果你想说这些基础知识对于主修的专业有用的话，那么就应该举这方面的例子，比如你在物理学方面的基础知识帮助你在医学领域研究，而不是像你所举的例子中would not have realized the space if we did not know astronomy，spece不就是属于astronomy的范畴的么。。这样几乎是跑题了，建议在写得时候先写好每一段的主旨词，这样在写得时候就不会轻易写跑。
倒数第二段使用了一下让步段感觉很聪明，增加了字数也使文章更加充实，但是这一切都是建立在前面对于你所支持观点的充分论述的基础上的

提的问题比较多，希望你别介意，很多理论也是在上新东方时所学的，我水平有限，只能将这些理论告诉你，希望对你有用

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恩，没关系哦，我会虚心接受的，我在重写改正下，这篇写的有些不够认真，需要改正态度了，谢谢哦。嘿嘿，

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呵呵，刚知道规矩，改楼下的习作：

Basic science subjects could [u]enhance students whole qualities[/u] [color=darkgreen](enhance能接双宾语吗？)[/color][color=darkgreen] [/color]and [u]benefits[/u][color=red](与enhance并列，不能加s)[/color] the development of them, however, take [color=red](应该用动名词taking)[/color] too much subjects, especially those which have no relation with students’ professions, isn’t always a good thing.

First of all, everybody’s energy is limited, no one can afford too much classes. There are lots of major subject classes undergraduates should take[u][color=red], (换成句号，要不加一个连词so或therefore,)[/color][/u]even though they do their best, they still, [u]however [/u][color=darkgreen](感觉多余，前面有even though了)[/color], fail to grasp all knowledge. Simultaneously, most of their time that is used to learn major subjects is occupied by other irrelative curricula. As a result, exams of their professional curricula fail. Another deficiency of taking too much class is the fact that knowledge probably can be forgotten because seldom [color=black]undergrads[/color] have opportunities to connect them to life or work. Students who graduated from universities usually work in their professional field[color=red](s)[/color], whereas knowledge that has no relation to their profession and far away from life [u](is) initially reserve(d)[/u] in their minds and then [u](is)[/u] gradually [u]forget[/u][color=red](forgotten).[/color]

Moreover, the motive to study derives from interesting, but, there is less probability that students are fascinated to every curriculum. If learning under condition that there is no interesting, [u]the process just only by dedicate with boring and painful [/u][color=red](这句不完整，谓语呢？)[/color]. They don’t learn with their hearts in those classes with an outcome that they definitely fail to [u]passing [/u][color=red](pass)[/color] exams. Even though they do their best and get [u]a good score (good scores)[/u] in exams, whereas, they just study for exams rather than really grasp knowledge. They also forget all of knowledge probably just [u]needing several weeks ([/u][color=darkgreen]感觉有点中国式的，呵呵, several weeks later[/color][u])[/u], or even one week. You ask them answer a question that they did it in last exam, they probably have no idea about it.

Basic curricula, nevertheless, expand not only undergraduates’ horizon and make them know more about the world they live in, but also perfect a view of their life and the world. Take a subject of history as an example. It [u]provides for us a chance[/u] ([color=red]provides us with a chance / provides a chance for us[/color])to recognize how our ancestors lived in prehistory and how the world developed. However, students who take basic curriculum that is out of their profession are supposed to be under the condition that they have sufficient time, or, studying is meaningless. In a word, it is rather superficial to say whether students should take basic science classes including those that aren’t part of their profession or not.

[color=darkgreen]整体上不错，不过语法上需要加强一些，[/color][color=darkgreen]一起加油！[/color]

[[i] 本帖最后由 cysunshine 于 2008-5-10 17:57 编辑 [/i]]

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Nowadays, （it is a wide debate about the issue）改成（there is a wide devate)你的句子太复杂了，虽然要用一些复杂的句子，可是不要太有意的复杂化。个人意见，外国人不会这样说话。 that whether university students should learn some basic science knowledge even they are not part of the field of study. Believing that students should learn other basic science knowledge, these people argue that a wide range of knowledge could bring more opportunities in their future. On the other hand, those who think students should study much deeper in the field of the study believe that specialists are more successful in the professional fields. In my own opinion, I agree with the former view.（ And then my arguments for the point ）改成（My opinion )are listed as follows.

The most important reason for my view is that the people who have a wide range of knowledge meet the requirement of the modern society. (Following the development of science and technology改成（Due to the scientific and technologic development) there is an increasing demand for people who are able to take in a great area at a glance. There is, in other words, (a demand for people who are capable of seeing the whole forest rather than the trees,)改成（a demand for the kind of people who have the capability to see the whole forest rather than just a few trees)这样是不是可以留下更深刻的印象？ of making overall judgment. So I think it is necessary for university students to understand other basic science knowledge which is not part of the field of their main study.

Another important aspect is that students can have more choice in searching themselves interest if they take certain number of other basic science classes. Many students may choose their major in （a)haste and don’t know what they really interest at the beginning of attending university. If they take other basic science classes, they could find their interest fields and be able to timely change their major. As a consequence, they can learn in an active way.

All in all,( I think)I believe你用的I think太多了，尽量用i think。。换写其他的，虽然也是简单的词但是表示不一样 that university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study, because a wide spectrum of knowledge can not only bring more opportunities to students, but also help them figure out what they really like to do.

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1、life-wasting是形容词吗？如果是就没问题了。。如果不是的话应该换一下。。我不太拿的准

2、in my point of view 应该是from my point of view

3、Of course, it is conducive to the study of humanity and philosophy.
      可以改成And, it is.......因为of course 接后文好像有点唐突。。没有什么可of course的感觉啊

4、那个use computer to painting的例子挺好的

5、最后就是觉得，前两个理由不太饱满，可以多一点字数，加一些实际的例子。或者把倒数第二段提到前面来也可以

个人浅见

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1. 开头比较吸引人，我为啥老是写不出这种attractive的开头呢，反思啊
2. which including whether the university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study because they are useful是不是吧because提到前面就是which including whether the university students should be required to take basic science classes because they are useful even they are not part of the field of the study 更通顺一些，个人陋见
3. but not for the reason that he/she is not smart enough, which is proved by all the current remarkable workers.后面这半句看不太懂哦
4. 第四段which including helping them doing better ，应该是include
5. The problem,nonetheless,still has 是不是想表示the problem still exist呢
6. 最后一句有点别扭，但具体哪里说不太清，可能是两个从句有点修饰不清