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回复 2# 的帖子

refer...as....应该是 refer..to...

based of 应该是 based on

born作动词仅用于被动语态.

第三段要么have变成had,要么when变成since~

I never remain suspicious to the importance of facts 个人对庄重教的这句一直remain suspicious...＝ ＝。

回复 37# 的帖子

改了你的，我要睡觉了。医生要我注意休息，因为从考前我就一直在生病，呵呵，大家都加油

回复 3# 的帖子

play a role in~
be forgotten~
after they learned~
in order to do~

[quote]原帖由 [i]TOEFL759_198[/i] 于 2008-5-5 23:45 发表 [url=http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=142785&ptid=12186][img]http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
refer...as....应该是 refer..to...

based of 应该是 based on

born作动词仅用于被动语态.

第三段要么have变成had,要么when变成since~

I never remain suspicious to the importance of facts 个人对庄 ... [/quote]

多谢了！已经改过来了！
最后一句。。。为什么198一直remain suspicious呢？虽然庄重教的东西有时候是有点。。。飘渺吧、、、
给个建议吧。。
谢谢了！

回复 46# 的帖子

是这样，开始觉得直译过来比较别扭，后来问过俩国外朋友说没这用法。
所以不太确定，一直也没敢这么写～

回复 42# 的帖子

姐姐你好厉害，我一直想尝试英文思维，但是貌似我的中文惯式很严重似的，一直没有好的办法解决，姐姐你能告诉我你是怎么变得这么厉害的吗？ 至于用词的问题也说得很对，大概是因为词汇量都是老师用词汇书逼出来的，我会努力多查字典，这样应该会有效吧？国外的同学也教过我简单准确才是王道，偶还是个菜鸟，好悲哦:'(

[quote]原帖由 [i]melissa_lee[/i] 于 2008-5-5 23:47 发表 [url=http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/redirect.php?goto=findpost&pid=142786&ptid=12186][img]http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/images/common/back.gif[/img][/url]
改了你的，我要睡觉了。医生要我注意休息，因为从考前我就一直在生病，呵呵，大家都加油 [/quote]

嘿嘿…… 姐姐你要多注意身体哦:loveliness:  加油

回复 47# 的帖子

呵呵，是哦，我身体有些差，刚刚一直在作业，因为要毕业了，有很多REPORT要做，呵呵，这么晚了注意睡眠哦，  哈哈我很少听到有人叫我姐姐呢，因为身边的同学都比我大，嘿嘿，你加油吧，我不厉害哦，不要这样说我，我真的不厉害，考试前刚接触托福，不如大家的，你是高中生么？:)

回复 46# 的帖子

英文的方式要多练习，在日常生活中，给自己创造一个英文的环境啊，遇到一个问题，同学提出的一个建议之类的，你马上就想如何用英文去解释，还有，接触些外国人很有用，可以很快进步，跟他们讨论很多问题，先说出自己对问题的想法，用英文，然后，在让英语为母语的外国朋友给出他的建议，和如果是他该怎么回答，然后自己就会有个比较，慢慢就会提高了。

多看美剧～～

回复 5# 的帖子

考完了你才发上来。。。。。。。
anyway,写的很不错，开头漂亮，论证条理清晰，衔接的也不错，模板的功力不可小窥，只可惜我2次考试都没有用。。。。。
中间2段的重要性突出的不够，问题之一就是字数，尤其是第3段几乎和结尾段的字数一样，建议把中间2段论证部分的分量加重
第3段的All of this can demonstrate how crucial learning facts it is. 这一句有点重了，或者放在最后一段比较好一些，因为这是属于比较总结性的话而且不只是对分论点有效

羡慕你的语言，要是前两天考试的时候我能写出这样的就好了。。。。。
祝考试顺利

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[b][size=3]Should students learn ideas and concepts more important than facts, as some people believe here? Or some people oppose here? To be frank, as for me, it is too hasty to say which one is more important. And the importance of them should depend on the different circumstances.

[/size][/b][b][size=3]Two distinct curricula exist within students' lives. The obvious one--the overt curriculum--consists of the classes listed on the student's transcript and the knowledge the students acquire in ideas and concepts, The less obvious--but with the equal importance --is the covert curriculum, which is composed of  the facts.

Let's talk about ideas and concepts first, learning ideas and concepts has an great influence on the students' further [color=red]study[/color]. To some extent, [color=green]the basic concepts and ideas is the prerequisite for students as groundwork to skyscrapers（很好的写出了理论是基础，值得学习，我一开始理解成了万丈高楼平地起）[/color]. Without the basic groundwork, how workers to build a skyscraper. Similarly, a student who has no ideas about concepts , how could（[color=red]can[/color]?） he learn( handle) much more complex knowledge.

Let's assume that a person who has a large scope of ideas and concepts, but he has little practice experience or has never seen the facts about the ideas by his own. He would just simply believe that the ideas and concepts is the truth for ever. [color=green]Hardly can he have any doubt. （ He would not have any doubt.）[/color]In this condition, to come up with some new ideas, and to have a deeper understanding of these ideas would be very difficult for him. Therefore, students should also learn some facts.

Ideas and concepts are the experiences which come from facts. They have been found by some giants in the past. The(A) better way to go toward quikly is stand on the shoulder of giants. With the equal status, in today's rapidly and unpredictably changing world, attempting to learn from the past is no longer the wisest strategy. Students should combine the ideas and concepts what they have learned from books with the facts which they have realized by their own experiments, and then use their own minds and senses to judge. This is the best way to learn, and it's also the most importance of students.

To sum up, learning ideas and concepts [color=green]carry the same weight as( 比equal to更贴切)[/color] learing facts. What we should do is to learn some ideas combined with relative facts. Only in this way, we can have a better understanding about we have learnt.[/size][/b]
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[b][size=3]用了很多很好的短语组合，词语的变换很多，有很多值得学习的地方。受益匪浅！

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回复 52# 的帖子

请问红色是帮我改过的地方么？:)

红色是有疑问的地方

但是文章从内容上来说，是不是还需要一些例子来支持，就像一片文章不仅要有骨架，还要有血有肉，丰富一些。

回复 55# 的帖子

恩恩，就是这个，我最头疼的就是不会举例了，不知道该怎么办，作文时根本想不到例子，而且时间限制更思维定格了。。。

为啥没人帮偶看看呢16楼555

某198邪恶的飘过^_^.稍微改了改以前一篇写过的文章～

Newton’s First Law of Motion states that an object in motion tends to stay in motion in the same direction unless acted upon by an external force.

One day I was playing soccer in the yard, and the ball rolled and stopped near a little white dog.  This was a big trouble.  It turned up its ears, and waved its tail.  I had no idea what it was going to do.  I got panic and thought it would jump on me.  I gave up my soccer ball, turned around and ran away.  Now things got worse.  The little dog did not give up on me; it balked and ran after me.  I kept running and yelled for help.  People were telling me to stop running, but I could not hear them.

  At this time the owner of the dog had reached us.  She picked up the dog, smiled:“It won’t bite you.  It likes you.”  She put my hand on the dog.  It was the first time I got so close to a dog: the eyes were big and friendly; the hair was long and soft.  Suddenly I did not fear this little dog anymore.

The fear comes from my mind is just like the external force, it will affected me and change my direction. This event, combined with the Newton's First Law,  taught me a good lesson: a fear comes from ignorance, and facing it bravely, instead of avoiding, is the right way to approach it.  

Back to the topic, the marriage of concept and fact is the key which unlocks the greatest treasures in the best way!

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