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第一次上传，欢迎拍砖，被拍，意味着获得进步。

essay question:
You can learn a lot about people by the clothes they wear.         
       Although not very exactly, wearing can reflect one’s dress taste, aesthetics tendency directly; meanwhile reflect one’s character traits, nature of work, and state of mind indirectly. We can learn a lot about people by the clothes they wear.
       First of all, wearing can reflect one’s dress taste, aesthetics tendency directly. For example, people have tendency to choose their favorite style or color of clothes, some might prefer the simple style while the others prefer the complex, at the same time some might prefer bright colors while the others might prefer the deep colors. In addition, some always have the ability to choose the right clothes to appearing decent at the right occasions, while others’ performance about choosing clothes is poor. Although there is no strict standard to judge which dress taste or aesthetics tendency is better, people always have their own answer in their mind and can draw the conclusion that whose performance is better and whose is poor in general idea.
        And also, wearing can reflect one’s character traits and nature of work indirectly. According to some psychological materials, to a human being, although not very exactly again, wearing white means a tendency to lead a pure life; wearing black means a willing to show a cool feeling of mystery; wearing blue means quiet life is better; wearing yellow means full of energy; wearing green means cherishing the nature; wearing red means full of passion; wearing simple means tracing of peaceful mind; wearing luxury means a tendency of vanity. In addition, wearing can reflect one’s nature of work, for example, although being social elites at the same time, people who work in investment banks or consulting company always wear formally, while people who work in IT giants always wear casually.
        Finally, wearing can reflect one’s state of mind indirectly. People might have good mood to pay more attention to their clothes when their life is orderly. Meanwhile people may pay little attention to their wearing when their life is a totally mess, or when they are still struggling to fight against poverty. In other situation, we usually find some persons wearing casually while their minds are haunted with other concerned ideas; Einstein is a good example at this point.
        In general, wearing shows the traces of one’s inner world, if we are careful enough, we can capture some useful information about people by the clothes they wear.

有几句话不知道语法等方面有无错误，请高手指教（1）

According to some psychological materials, to a human being, although not very exactly again, wearing white means a tendency to lead a pure life; wearing black means a willing to show a cool feeling of mystery; wearing blue means quiet life is better; wearing yellow means full of energy; wearing green means cherishing the nature; wearing red means full of passion; wearing simple means tracing of peaceful mind; wearing luxury means a tendency of vanity.

有几句话不知道语法等方面有无错误，请高手指教（2）

Although there is no strict standard to judge which dress taste or aesthetics tendency is better, people always have their own answer in their mind and can draw the conclusion that whose performance is better and whose is poor in general idea.

个人认为目前的几大缺点，不知大家是否有同感

1，过渡不够自然；
2，提笔忘字，常常需要借助于Google翻译等工具；
3，写一篇文章，耗时间太长。

哪位高手拍一下砖哪

我认为第一段可以加内容使其丰富。
para3这句话不好：
According to some psychological materials, to a human being, although not very exactly again, 试做修改

wearing white means a tendency to lead a pure life; wearing black means a willing to show a cool feeling of mystery; wearing blue means quiet life is better; wearing yellow means full of energy; wearing green means cherishing the nature; wearing red means full of passion; wearing simple means tracing of peaceful mind; wearing luxury means a tendency of vanity.这段很有意思，但写在托福作文里显得太长了，可以试举其中两三种颜色，毕竟你的文章不是时尚杂志或心理书籍有关穿衣解析。

感谢heqiongsophie的真知灼见，我也觉得第一段写的太薄，但是我想不出什么好主意来丰富它的内容。