米米tianxin 2008-4-19 01:24
作文，求改
[size=3]折腾了一个晚上，终于鼓捣出来一篇作文，果然还是中文文章比较好写，爪子一挥就是几千字……[/size]
[size=3]第一次发帖，第一次写成文，第二天来到小马，27就要考试……[/size]
[size=3]俺英语基础奇差，因此心里素质不错，请同志们尽情的拍，最好能顺路告诉我都这样了，作文能得多少分？[/size]
[size=3]题目是：同意不 the influence of classmates are more important than parents:Q [/size]
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[font=宋体][size=14pt]People, globally speaking, feel ambivalent about which person influence them most in their daily life or career life, their parents or classmates. Nevertheless, I do not find the alternative hard result in I will not hesitate to choose the latter, for some of the essential reasons.[/size][/font]
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[font=宋体][size=14pt]First of all, it is always top of the list of my viewpoints that adults regularly spend much more time with their classmates; particularly they are willing to stay with classmates who always help them relax and relieve the pressure from work or study instead of giving them stress just like the parents do.[/size][/font]
[font=宋体][size=14pt]In my life, a great many things change when I leave home and go to university. I spend less time with my patents and no longer depend on them, in fact, the last time I had a talk with my parents is two months ago, and instead, I usually have a chat or discuss something about my major with my classmates in my spare time. Therefore, classmates have much more opportunity to influence adults. [/size][/font]
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[font=宋体][size=14pt]Another thing which is equally important to the above mentioned is the classmate, the person who shares the same love in the same expertise with us, can give us more direct and useful advice. Obviously, the suggestion given by classmates, their thoughts about life, even their manner of doing can have an important influence on us. the same major and similar age, classmates can understand our feeling easier and better than our patents so that their influence plays an important and strong role in our life.[/size][/font]
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[font=宋体][size=14pt]In addition, an equally essential factor which deserves people's attention is that the vision and mind of classmates is border than parents. Parent’s experience is overtime and they more or less could not keep steep with fashion. For instance once I talk something about rock music with my parents, they know nothing about it. Hence, how do they influence me if they show ignore on the rock area?[/size][/font]
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[font=宋体][size=14pt]From what have been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that classmates can produce a far-reaching impact on people and the influence should be maintain, which will benefit people and their family, even the society as a whole.[/size][/font]
