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[b][size=12pt][align=center][align=center][b][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Building a center for business or in agriculture?[/font][/size][/b][/align][/align][b][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]With the development of society, science and technology plays a dramatically significant role in the every country’s economy. Nowadays, a university plans to develop a new research center of either agriculture or business in my country. Considerable though the advantages that building a center for business leads to are, they can not compete with the fundamentality that building a center for research in agriculture. [/font][/size][/b]
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[b][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Among the advantages of building a center in agriculture is that it can stimulate and develop the approach to solve one of the most seriously global problem that food is critical insufficient with the help of the agriculture center. Everyone knows that nobody can live without food. If we solve the problem of food lacking so that all people have the enough food to enjoy, the quality of people’s life will enhanced tremendously and people will be healthier and happier. Moreover, with the enough food, people would not need to commit a crime such as dacoity and stealing for their arrival and criminous rate must be declining and social security will be better. The harmony of society can be erected.[/font][/size][/b]
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[b][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Another contributing factor of building a center for research in agriculture is that it can create and develop techniques that make the farm who is the majority of population in the world more affluent and easier to hard work so that they have more free time to do whatever they would like to. For example, they could do some sports games and travel around. In this way, it can promote the economic advancement of other domain such as tourism. [/font][/size][/b]
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[b][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]Also, building a center for business has many of advantages such as accelerate the development of economy, increase the trade between different countries, different peoples and different regions. For example, it can identify the distinct difference not only in culture which affect people’s activity but also in the distribution of varies of resources, which prominently speed the global economy. [/font][/size][/b]
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[b][size=12pt][font=Times New Roman]In my opinion, though the advantages of building a center for business is obvious, the building a center in agriculture is overwhelming because of its basic status in the social evolution. So, I prefer to choose a center in agriculture over a center for business.
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回复 3# 的帖子

哦，谢谢指教！其实这是我写的第一篇文章，请多多指教！:lol

希望你的下一篇能成为范文。

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好的，努力！！！:victory: 请多提宝贵意见！