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回复 38# 的帖子

说实话,除了最后一段其余用时半小时多些在中午午休时写的因为急着要上课,最后一段是我晚上放学写的,所以时间上真的不是很严格...不过整体的还真很难在半小时内写这么多.

回复 39# 的帖子

谢谢你的建议，我写的时候就因为除了这些真的想不到什么了，所以觉得有些重复，，，今天模考BARRON'S，现在好郁闷啊，规定时间完不成任务诶。。。作文两个都写不完。。。前一个要怎么写？

回复 40# 的帖子

TOEFL没有学术性的要求么？我看大家写的都很学术的感觉，可是我写不出啊，怎么办？ 万一考试我遇到的题目我没有思路怎么办，时间好短啊，我 27号就考试了。。。:(

回复 43# 的帖子

我看了你的文章跟我的思路大相径庭啊,不过我这都练了15篇了但真的比不上你的,何况我又不是在规定时间内完成,差距啊....话说回来,我觉得考试时考官看了无穷无尽的学术性很强的文章,你如果换一种方式写作,比如你这篇文章,我觉得既有深度又有生动的细节(十分关键),没有理由不给高分...所以不用担心,遇到这类的题目有自己的特点很好啊,但是对于有些类型的可能学术点的能更好点,不仅好表达也能体现一种严谨性.所以还是尽量多练习下,但是不要摒弃这种写法啊~~~
PS:我也27号受死...一起加油吧~~~

If I could go back to some time and place in the past , I may choose last summer vacation ,in Britain. That summer ,Frank ,my friend who is a professor of law in Cambridge university ,invited me to his collage to have a cooperation on a study of Chinese common law .we had a unforgettable periods there ,a very happy time. His university is in a small town ,named Cambridge ,located in Britain .I like this small town because it has a very charming ocean view .I mean the sky there is so blue and the beach is always full of sunshine .Frank and me both like the beach ,In our spare time, we just dance ,sing, discuss our research prepare the materials there when the sun is setting down ,when the ocean breeze is blowing and the sea birds are singing ,how romantic it can be ! It is the first time I have such a leisure time abroad I can deeply touch and feel the British daily life .culturally speaking…….. And the trip had widen my horizon and enlarge my knowledge Last but not least ,when the trip end ,Frank and I got to know each other deeply .our friendship have gone to a new high level. In conclusion last summer I had a good time in Britain I will never forget there charming ocean view ,the noble life style, and Frank’s good friendship If I could ,I would choose to go back



初稿~小弟5。10  现在恐慌中。。。。牛人给改改阿~

回复 34# 的帖子

谢谢你的建议呀，很有价值:loveliness:

回复 44# 的帖子

嗯说的有道理,如果没有做要求的话当然可以尝试,但是如果有要求的话还是不要冒这个险了.....
我练了大概有20篇的样子了,而且去年12月还战过一次,5月4号二战~

回复 44# 的帖子

恩，好的，谢谢你，OG上好多作文题目诶，不知道该写什么啊？练了那么多了？真是用功，我要好好像大家学习了，，，我27号大连。。。呵呵。。。

回复 37# 的帖子

哈哈  谢谢你的建议  这篇是在网吧写的，而且时间超过了，后面就没考虑那么仔细了，我再改改:loveliness:

上次说的关于你的语法问题，一个是词类的混用问题，你势必要弄清楚什么词用来修饰什么词
                          另外是句子问题，你一定要记住在没有连词的情况下，一个句子有且只有一个谓语动词

这是两个大的问题，你在以后写作之后带着这两个问题仔细检查两遍，一段时间之后一定可以改过来滴:D   嘿嘿……

melissa_lee  你的文章写得我有种共鸣的感觉，嘿嘿ie  我有个同学写作29 说文章写得让改卷的陪你一起感动肯定会成功的   至于你说的结构问题， 个人觉得自己做个模板把你的文章框一框应该也不是很难滴:loveliness:

回复 50# 的帖子

哦这样啊，前面的一个作文有模板么？怎么很少有人介绍小作文的经验呢？我完全没有方向呵呵。。。

How much number of friends is suitable for you?

　　　In modern society, friendship play a very important role in international relationships, it is vital that whether you can success or not most rely on your communication circle. However, how much number of friends is suited for that you spend time with them, some people will think that together with one or two close friend is the best choice. But other people would believe that a large number of friends are necessary to them in their life.
　　There are some important reasons explain the former opinion above. Firstly, it is quiet when you just play with one or two friends and suitable for people who love calm and peaceful enviroment. They will enjoy the time for the reason that personal character, such as introvert personlity. Furthemore, it would be more effective that people consult and exchange idea with just one or two friends, they may also solve the problems more efficient, because through that way they can put more attention to the nature of the problem while they have to spent more time to take into account to others if a large number of people at presence. However, it also have some unadvantages, for example, they will have less chance to recognize new friends, and it is also difficult to share more knowledges.
　　The strongest reason to support the later opinion is that they can make more friends, it is a great thing for many average people, they can get more relax and happiness from that and do really enjoy it, especially in this fast-paced society, which impose great pressure on most people, so that they have to ease it by chatting with others. At the mean time, it is a effective way to share more informations and learn more knowledges by communicating with many friends, not just one or two, because different people has different scope of informations and knowledges, it is a wonderful thing that if who can absorb them from their friends. They can also play more kinds of games when they participate in some activities, because some of the games must need many people to involve in. However, one ought to often phone or email their friends in a certain time, so it is time-consuming to maintain the friendships.
  　From the opinions that I concluded above, I think that it is a good choice to recognizing a large number of friends. Although it is time-consuming, it is really worthy to do, especially in modern society, and everybody will have a good future through this way.

上班的时候偷偷写的,望大家拍哈

请问大家一个问题啊，那些所谓的万能模版是怎么总结的　怎么老是套不起来啊

郁闷死了，屋里上不了网， 好不容易出来上，U盘还用不了，外面还 下着雨，气死我了 ～～～～～～～～！！

回复 53# 的帖子

因为是别人的吧呵呵，我也没有模板诶，看了看别人给出的模板，可是我觉得不会用，反而因为想往里套而影响了自己的思路，别人的东西就是别人的，用起来觉得有些生硬不自然，如果自己可以经过研究找到自己的模板才好啊。。。我觉得所谓的模板就是自己实践找到的规律哦。。。每个人的思维方式都不一样，找到适合自己的吧。。。呵呵:) 可能我说的不对哦。。。

回复 55# 的帖子

自己做模板挺容易的，先找几个别人的比较好的模板，写作的时候就硬往里套，这样写出来当然你会觉得别扭，写得不好，所以写完之后你要把自己的作文改它三四遍，改通改顺改得顺眼了，再把这个时候的模板提取出来，这样练个四五篇，自己的模板自然就出来了，嘿嘿 ……
至于综合写作，主要是听力的问题，写作模板网上很多，大家用的也大相径庭:loveliness:

回复 2# 的帖子

小小蝎很敬业，到网吧帮大家改作文，值得大家学习！:D

回复 54# 的帖子

yoyo 要有耐心啊 :)

没人来拍呀……再放上来一遍~~呼呼

With the chance to go back some time in the past, the third year in high school will be listed in my priority. For the sake of the fixed education system in China, each high school student is asked to take the entrance exam to college or university. To accomplish the goal in my future career, I have no choice but to make preparation as sufficient as possible to acquire access to university for further education after high school. The great efforts I have made as well as the precious experience in the whole year impress me a lot. Consequently, I wish to go back to the time when I was in my third grade of high school, if possible.

Firstly, motivated by great pressures of the entrance exam, everyone in my class studied with sparing no efforts, which makes me realize the enormous potential people own. In that days, I kept studying for an average of over ten hours every day even though sometimes I was truly exhausted. Long term work of brain practiced my persistence which was critical whatever job or career I choose. Moreover, I succeeded in mastering efficient study skills. For example, arranging limited time for at least five subjects need to be carefully plot and tried. By properly dividing the time into several sections, I found that efficiency of obtaining new knowledge and reviewing former lessons had been obviously raised.

Secondly, some affairs happened during that year and they are meaningful for every member in my class. A ceremony was routinely held for students in the third year when the average age of students was 18, which showed that the students became adult in Chinese custom. I still remember that day, I, with my classmates, dressed ourselves in suit and was gathered in an auditorium where the ceremony took place. We took pictures and laughed happily, which I want to experience once more if possible.

Also, I started to live in dormitory with other five members and it was my first time to live without my parents. Thus, I had to took care myself while I was busy with daily preparation for the exam.
Not only did I develop a more steady friendship with my roommates, but also I managed to live independently.

All in all, what I have gone through during that period let me more mature than before. Never will I forget about the valuable experience in my future. In addition, it is undeniable that both the great efforts and the sound friendship will help with my career.

回复 33# 的帖子

好主意啊！谢谢了，困扰我半天。