derkaiser 2008-4-13 16:39
Twe 180 请大家改下作文谢谢
[b][font=Arial]180. Movies are popular all over the world. Explain why movies are so popular. Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. [/font][/b]
Titanic, Star Wars, Rocky…… All these movie have become too firmly embedded in people’s mind. Currently, movie is more and more popular in the world so no wonder that somebody says this is the movie’s age.
Movie can bring us a large number of audio and visual effects than any other media. Without the impressive shock visual effects and powerful audio effects, the movie is just a pale and tasteless sequence of pictures. It is those magnificent visual effects that make it possible that you see the story seem to be happening just in front of your face. The movie not only let you enjoy a wonderful story, but also make you taste a visual and audio feast.
However, in the past, when no movie, people are willing to read novel to kill time. But in an age when movie is so popular, it would be narrow-minded in the extreme to think novel is more attractive than movie. Compared with novel, movie’s story is filled with magic power to bring audience into the story and make audience feel being the protagonists. Laughing when the actor is happy, tearing when the actor is sad , being horrible when the actor faces some danger. It’s the movie make you live in the story.
Moreover, a single picture would tell us more than thousands of words. Imaging that you can see a movie with your family or friends,and share your happiness or sad ,together laughting or crying.But can you read a novel with them as so? It’s the movie give you a opportunity to enjoy entertainment with your family and friends. For couples,movie also can be a way to express their love. There is a increasing number of couples like to have a date in theater on Valentine's Day.As a bridge between one person and another , movie makes people close.
Finally, movie is cheaper than other entertainment. You may pay for much more money on going to disney or traveling, but movie only cost you just 50 RMB per person at most. Why do not you choose this cheap and wonderful activity?
In a word , so powerful and magic movie is that make our life colorful. Do not be hesitate , quickly go to the theater and enjoy your movie now.
melody2008 2008-4-18 18:47
一点愚见: (数字表示段落数)
1,so no wonder that somebody says this is the movie’s age
so 后面是不是应该连接句子啊,所以是不是该在so后面加上there is 或it is
同理 第三段的 when no movie 感觉也是这样
3,in the past, when no movie, people are willing to
既然是过去的事情,are不应该改为were么?
4,together laughting or crying可以把together 防到laughting or crying后面么?
For couples,movie also can be 可以该为waching movie么?
movie makes people close 可以改为 closer么?
问题:我一直不知道什么时候该用复数什么时候该用单数
比如这篇文章里到底是用movie还是movies,我就很迷惑啊?:'( :'(
求教!!:Q
heqiongsophie 2008-4-19 07:32
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感谢楼上的批改
movie是可数，可以是 a movie or movies
heqiongsophie 2008-4-19 07:36
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Movie can bring us a large number of audio and visual effects than any other media
这句若加上一个vivid，就好多了、
However, in the past, when no movie, people are willing to read novel to kill time将改为people would like to spent leisure time on reading since they seldom went to cinema.
走聪明 2008-4-19 14:58
movie is more and more popular in the world so no wonder that somebody says this is the movie’s age.
感觉 不像英语 毛病说不出 但somebody 改成 everybody 更有气势
Movie can bring us a large number of audio and visual effects than any other media.
没有比较级 不能用than larger 好一些
还有effect 能不能 用其他代一下 impact 就不错 我的意思是不能老用 effect
enjoy a wonderful story 感觉不妥
However, in the past, when no movie, people are willing to read novel to kill time.
in the past, however, when no movie, people were willing to read novels to kill time. 感觉小说是可数的
think novel 中间要加 that 吧
It’s the movie give you a opportunity to enjoy entertainment with your family and friends. For couples,movie also can be a way to express their love. There is a increasing number of couples like to have a date in theater on Valentine's Day.As a bridge between one person and another , movie makes people close.
这几句 好像不太像英语风格 虽然是层层递进 但外国人可能看不出 关键是 coherent 词 没用好 我只是说出自己感觉
Laughing when the actor is happy, tearing when the actor is sad , being horrible when the actor faces some danger. 很好 但是不是 标点符号没标清楚 到底与那一句是相关联
But can you read a novel with them as so? 很好 我看哭了
It’s the movie give 忠间缺that
movie is cheaper than other entertainment. 逻辑错 other kinds of
Why do not you choose this cheap and wonderful activity? 太突然了 没围绕中心 这段话 没有明显 forexample 的词 写吧 不会扣分的
Do not be hesitate , quickly go to the theater and enjoy your movie now. 老是号召 没点题
总结 这篇文章 在老托 可得3-4 分 我认为 文章的原因少 一便宜 二 magic than others 其他原因分布很散
最后一段总结不好 但语言不错 就是不像为考试写的
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