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哪个好心人能不能帮我看看作文哦

我五月份考试，感觉作文很吃力，现在发表一篇，请大家给我拍砖哈
[font=Times New Roman]Topic 20,big city or country,which is better for children to grow uo in ?[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]Having grown up in the countryside,I certainly hope our next generation can grow up in the city.Among various factors that countribute to the decisions of mine are the
two most
obvious ones.[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]It goes without saying that the sanitation and safety in the city are better than countryside.Children ‘s health is always put in the first palce.Just like the food condition,seldom are they worried about the malnutrition.Futhermore you can buy anything that you expects to find in the supermarket. Not to mention how elaborate they design!You can take some cheap vitamin compounds everyday to keep you children’s nurtrient balance.Owing to the hygienic system,children promote their immunity. And people dwelling in the city have higher qualities ,they are aware of responsible for others.It’s easier for chileren residing in the city get a good treatment when they get sick.Theye are many indoor exercise equipments in the gymnasium.there appereared to be so many children in this place to swim or play tennis,and it ‘s more secure for children to swim indoors.[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]Another important factor that attribute to my opinions is education.It’s undeniable that the education plays an increasingly important role in our society.growing uo in the cith ,the children can obtain reliable source of information and can widen their horizon and broaden their vision.there is no doubt that most of
our teachers yearn for city life in virtue of high salary and stable life.So in the city assemble most prominent and prestigious teachers.there are many channels for children to get enducated in the city to keep abreast of the modern life.such as The Internet,newspaper,magazinesand so on .On the contrary,countryside is a more obsturated.,it’s probable make you drop behind the world..For example,compare with two students accuraceof English pronunciation,you may find the children in the city
have downright merits.[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]However,Children living in the city ,with heavier pressure.also have some demerits than those who living in the rural.City life is so competitive,and intense,so children are compeled to learn extracurricula skills to become outstanding. Children dwelling in the rural needn’t suffer from about this.they have more relaxed childhood.[/font]
[font=Times New Roman]Anyways,the obvious benefits for children growing up in the city would outweigh the disadvantages.there is no perfect thing existing in the world.So on account of this we can find that it’s absolutely better for children growing up in the city.[/font]

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在哪里呢

那我该发表大哪里去呢？
我不知道每周发表文章的帖子在哪里啊

Look at this:
[url]http://www.xiaomaguohe.net/bbs/thread-11128-1-1.html[/url]
We have writing assignment  each week.:)