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第一篇作文，欢迎大家拍砖。。十分感谢

[size=5]Some universities require students to take classes in many subjects. Other universities require students to specialize in one subject. Which is better? [/size]
[size=5]      Choosing either tradition methods of education such as learning broad subjects or specializing in a subject has advantages and disadvantages. Which students would prefer depends on their own experience, taste and objective. Personally, I would prefer to select broad subjects for two main reasons. [/size]
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[size=5]     Taking classes in many subjects provides an opportunity for receiving a well rounded  education, which broaden the students’ horizon. Not only do they touch more different curriculums, but also confirm which field of study they appealed with, for here they could touch and develop their knowledge. The students, especially continuous in education, who decide to specialize later on their academic vocations, hold a strong basis toward them. Their versatility will avail them of wide jobs and more appreciation. This is just what they want most. [/size]
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[size=5]     Though various subjects can broad students' horizons, choosing free-job which bases on students' preference is becoming increasingly popular in the modern society. College boys and girls, never fail to be fascinated by novel things, are expected to try their best to taste some thing such as fixing electricians, mading a beautiful toy, sewing a cool T-shirt. Due to these sorts of students, it is ideal for them to join in broad subjects. There was a time when I was a little girl, I always sew cloths to my barbee girl, I wanted to dedicate her charm because I thought she is another little me. Inevitably, the job was not quite so simple. But now I was extremely pleased with the spacious subjects that I have chose potentially. So it is of great benefits for me to pick up learning broad subjects. [/size]
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[size=5]     On the other hand, students who focus on one discipline have more advantage over those who in larger range as a freshman in career. Needless to say, if I were a leader of company, I would be attracted by the front one for their superior skill and active contributions even though their knowledge looks like a little delicate. However, only the studies of their field is what they interested on and they might consider the other courses, such as music, painting, and sport, as boring things with deep bias. Obviously, there exists negative influence on their whole education.[/size]

[[i] 本帖最后由 fdfdloveu 于 2008-3-31 22:44 编辑 [/i]]

想法不错啊~ e.g.很生动
我也想等拍的 不过先过来踩下 讨论下 希望大家给我也指正啊
有几个语法错影响表达了
College boys and girls, never fail to be fascinated by novel things, are expected to try their best to taste some thing such as fix electricians, made a beautiful toy, sew a cool T-shirt and the like.
插入语有问题吧~ such as后面这个表达合适吗？
Choosing either tradition methods of education such as learning broad subjects and specializing in a subject has advantages and disadvantages.
either...or  所以觉得话要据意思从新写
knowledge looks like a little delicate
looks 就行了吧 不过没见过这样的配搭
还有几个时态问题看到了~

College boys and girls, never fail to be fascinated by novel things
things 可以去掉吧
感觉第二段的事例不怎么搭配样的
总体还好呵  全文结构可能改进下哈

回3楼,novel这里是形容词,不加things不行的吧..

先谢谢两位筒子~~2楼滴文文在哪哦?

1:I would prefer selecting broad subjects for two main reasons.
应该是prefer to do sth吧,
2     which broaden the students’ horizon    >>>broadens
3     but also confirming which field of study they appealed with   >>>.confirming 是不是要改原形呢
4    hold a strong basis toward them.   >>>..toward  能这么用吗？ 小弟不知道，请大家帮忙确认下
5    are expected to try their best to taste some thing such as fixxing electrician     〉〉〉〉〉some things   fixing  up?

6looks like a little delicate    这里delicate 有点问题吧。。。
感觉搂住得单词比我多，起码里面还有一两个词我不懂。。。。拍的不对，勿骂阿

呵呵，个人意见，这片文章写specialize in one subject 是不是好发展话题些，有没有觉得这片文章少了点例子诶~若写pursuing one subject的话可以举些名人的例子，Hawking, Mary Curie什么的，都是执着热爱自己的研究领域矢志不渝获得成功的人~~我也是新手哈，4月就要考托福了，作文还没怎么开始练，刚写了第一篇作文等着拍砖呢，多多指教哦！

谢谢筒子们,我记下了..
语法错误比较多唉...