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   The issue of the reason why people attend the university or college has trigerred the heated discussion.Various people have entirely distinct perspectives due to their difference experience . As for me , I hold thaat attending the university or college canpresents people more opportunities to hunt for jobs and to learn more knowledges and skill.
   First of all , attending the university or college can provides people with more good jobs .A person who study in university and acquire some major knowledge canbe competitive for the job which is impossible for him or her to get . For instances,oe\ne of  my friends whose major  in International Business is not only qualifide to the insurance company,but also cometitive for international trade company ,Furthermore,both of that two jobs can present my friend more espected experiences and a generous salary . Therefore, if people want to obtain a good job and become a member of white-collar ,the best choice is for he or her to attend the university or college.
   In addition , it is the universal fact that university or college are the palaces of acquiring the knowledges. Teachers and professors do their best to er\nrich the students' knowledges.And the activities which are hold bu scholl would give students an occaxion to be friends of specialists in their major . I vividly remember that Imake friends with an expert in ecnomics ,who teach me am\number of knowledges , experiences in my studies and skills I can benefit from . Consequently,it is in the university or college that person can increase knowledge.
   Although,it is the  undenied the fact that there are other strenths of accepting higher education ,such as making friends with foriegn people , falling in love with her or him , participating in physical games .All of  them is not the main reason why people attend the college or university.
   In conclusion,I strongly believe that there are two essential reasons which encourage such alarge numberof people to attend the university or college .It is true that the other reasons exist. But the two main reason which I hold far outweigh the others .

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第一段
1第一行：unversity和college泛指的时候要用负数universities、colleges；
2第一行，应该是different experience
3第二行 I hold thaat attending the university or college canpresents people more opportunities to hunt for jobs and to learn more knowledges and skill前半部分不对that拼错，巨型也不对，应该是I hold the opinion that或者是I believe that；泛指也没有加s；这句后面knowledge不可数不能加s，skill可数应该加s。。。

第二段
1.第一行泛指还是没有加s；can provide；第一句话的逻辑也有问题，有更多好工作不是因为进入了大学，而是因为在大学学到了知识，这个在用的时候，逻辑要清楚；a persin who studies。。acquires 不过这里最好用people who study/acquire；
2.第二行canbe competitive for the job which is impossible for him or her to get 这个句子严重表达不清楚，建议你再整理一下思路，既然都competitive了，如果对于he/her再impossible的话，就矛盾了；for instance不用加s。。
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谢谢呵呵呵
第二行canbe competitive for the job which is impossible for him or her to get 应该是canbe competitive for the job which is impossible for him or her to get  before.
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