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托福习作一篇。跪求猛拍！！！

Why do you think people attend college or university?use special reasons and examples to support your answer.                                                                              
                                                              Why we choose university?
        In the past, It was absolutely a dilemma weather to attend school or not. However, the past has turned into ash. Nowadays, nearly everyone maintains that students should proceed on their study to attend the university, never remaining suspicious of the privileges, which endowed by the campus life.
        The career preparation, one of the advantages, rendered by the university, must be an important consideration in people’s decision. Because of the rapid development of modern society, numerous kinds of advanced skills, which prove to be difficult to gain without attending University, are acquired to grasp. For example, some tempting corporations, such as Microsoft, Google and Golden Sach, fix their eyes only on the graduates from supreme class of universities.
        What’s more, in my opinion, the education in University renders people not only financial advantages, but also essential intangible fortune. The experiences in campus build a man, primitively forming value and steady it. Let’s take NBA as an example, some high school students lost themselves on the stage full of money and glory, due to lack of self-discipline. They lost their original faith little by little, as they were drinking, playing. On the contrary, thanks to the education in campus, many graduates proved more likely to achieve a prominent success, with a strong sense of self-control. It high time to say that university supplement us enormous fortune, which includes tangible and intangible one.
        From what has been discussed above, we may reasonably draw a conclusion why so many people are university enthusiasts.

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[quote]What’s more, in my opinion, the education in University renders people not only financial advantages, but also essential intangible fortune. The experiences in campus build a man, primitively forming value and steady it. Let’s take NBA as an example, some high school students lost themselves on the stage full of money and glory, due to lack of self-discipline. They lost their original faith little by little, as they were drinking, playing. On the contrary, thanks to the education in campus, many graduates proved more likely to achieve a prominent success, with a strong sense of self-control. It high time to say that university supplement us enormous fortune, which includes tangible and intangible one.[/quote]

The example of NBA you give is not probably.

And the  last sentence can be put in the conclusion para.

举例的角度还可以参看下贴：:)
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